~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[j. paul]

Legacy,

A solid meat and bones answer to your newest treasure is-'yes'-unfortunate as it may seem is very, very real. Structurally it is different with the sense of narrative between Jane and John and leads to ease of transition. The poem is heart-gripping and your choice of words simply spectacular; in fact, I'd like to experiment with word cutting to see if any impact is gained or lost.

Nonetheless, no real review is a review unless there is some semblance of societal criticism. The following commentary is not about your poem; oh contraire, it is about the society in which I live and what's become of it. I am a hopeless romantic at heart who believes the real-true-honest-to-goodness-love never dies. Nope I believe that those folks in my lifetime whom I have loved each have a part of me, and I a part of them. I find that the American culture has again 'lowered the bar of acceptable standards' far too low in the case of love and subsequently marriage.

Love for most people is just that-a flash in the pan, infatuation, lust, self and sometimes partner satisfying, highly relational-relationships. My hope beyond all hope is that we can, though whatever means help to put real love back into the emotion. Don't get me wrong, I sit and wonder if I'll ever be able to capture that feet off the ground, floating through the air in total bliss, what I refer to as 'chemistry' with another lady. However, notice the word-chemistry-and that is indeed what it is�not love. We should strive everyday to find new issues, matters, differences, and quirks to fall in love all over again with our partners.

Sorry for the length

[sheila lott]

True love never dies sometimes we forget to nourish it.We as mankind tend to take things for granted.We need to pay attention and realize that true love is a wonderful gift that should be cherished.I love your poem.Very Very nice.Thanks for the invite.

[Rhan F. Sydney]

I like very much the flow of this piece and it does reflect on the truth of many relationships. I thank you for sharing this work. It was really very good and I applaud your verbage and imagery. You definitely gave my mind a good thing to ponder for a while. Thank you again for sharing.

~RFS~

[Richard Novak]

I like the syle here, reminds me of a play. Narrator, chorus (in red) and dialogue. There is even a feel of epic Greek tragedy in the poem.

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

-------Favorite lines.

Love & blessings
Richard

[Dave Mansfield]

This is an excellent autopsy of a love turned sour. This has a lot of movement to it that I like. It's as if each color denotes a different aspect of the psyche trying to reach out and comprehend the source of rejection. Well done.

[BJ "Bunneh3000" Brown]

Powerful write. The progression of Jane and John's relationship was all too familiar. Many will relate to the mere quotes of John and Jane alone. The query in between progresses well with it too. And I love the tasty quote you left the poem on... The image of the promise left drowning in sour wine is a powerful image/thought that leaves the reader dwelling on it long after...

I like ur style!!

[Carissa]

Most interesting, I don't see poems written in such a fashion very often at all. But, I like what you had to say.....

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is something like how it goes.. it begins as a flame and ends an ember.. sometimes less..
But if this is how it turns out then i don't think it is true love.. no love is free of problems .. but true love overcomes them .. i enjoyed the jane and joh doe lines.. nice poem, Legacy..
True love should never fail us ..
Chloe
xoxo

[Ice QueenJen]

I was told once that you grow to love one another, from a stage of liking the person. Many don't take the time or effort to really get to know and understand what the other is about, as you say favorite color, etc. These are the minor things- what seems to be lacking and failing in this relationship is communication! The breakdown of that is the cause of many loves dying, withering away until there is nothing left.
In a relationship where there is true love, should stem from a deep friendship. Taking each day savoring what we have- until its to late and the love once there is gone.

Your poem was right on, and I loved it. It also made me think of the relationship I am in now, its taking time and patience in getting to know the other person. I want my liking for him to grow into a deep love.

[R J Askew]

Yes, of course it dies. It just does. And then grows again. And dies again.