~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Barry!]

=whew=

Man, quite a lot going on here!

It may play a bit toward the melodramatic... but, isn't that the way deep emotions always play out?

This is a good bit of writing and another lesson in the danger of expectations, I guess.

I'd leave as is and head on to the next item on your soul's agenda.

[JC]

From an artistic point of view, visually stimulating. If it could be in motion much like fireworks where the light starts out small and grows bigger, this would be a super wow. Alas, I found it difficult to read with the type set. Seems to me this might work better as a play script. The thought behind the words very provocative and dead on. I don't believe "true" love sets in, until you've experience life, together. It is the trials of life that infuse your souls together. I liked the poetry and the message.

[Mizu No Mita]

Being a teen I've seen relationships go like this before. People who are more meant to be than they know but the push to quickly and break apart. I like the flow of the story within the poem.
Good write Legacy, I think it's fine with the ending it has.

[Mitchell]

I thought it beautiful Legacy. Keep up the good work!!

[Tara]

Nicely done

[Gravedigger]

Being a teenager, I know only too well the promises made to hastily all in the name of love. Few people ever realize what they are promising when the words fly out of their mouth. As you said, fewer still actually take the time to find out everything that is unspoken about that person. I think that your message was clearly made; that love is all we make of it, and whether we do truly love from our hearts or if our words are hollow will show.

Brava! Brava! Bravissima!!!

The only suggestion that I will make is that you used a period once or twice, but not consistantly. Was that to add an accent, or were you unsure about where they belonged? (Same thing with they commas...)

[Lkjhgf]

To answer your email, this poem is an extremely accurate and honest portrayal of love at first site. The first couple of months, or, in the cases of some lucky few, years, seem like Heaven together, but are soon followed by minor irritations that the couple might write off as a minor, occasional, lapse in an otherwise great relationship, yet end up eating the relationship alive by the end. I know this too well considering it's basically what I just went through less than one year ago.

Now, did you poem grab me at the beginning and pull me in? No. Did it overwhelm me with emotion and then leave me breathless at the end? No. But did it interest me enough to keep me reading? Absolutely. On an aesthetic level I would rate this poem at about average - it was good, but not great; worth publishing, but nothing worth winning an award for. This poem's strongest aspect is it's accurate portrayal of the (unfortunate) human, romantic condition.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I like the back and forth of john and jane.... this takes love apart and analyzes it with words, feelings, hopes, dreams..... True Love - hmmm.... I think there is such a thing and I think you have hit on it here - but real love, true love - if you have it you know it.... if you don't, you know the ache and the longing....

Kath

[Claudia MelGregory]

I'd say yes, this does come close to true relationships at least those I have experienced in the past, and have witnessed or observed experienced by others. I love the Jane-John dialogue. From the very beginning talking at each other not really to each other ... and that is so real.

The break down of the relationships, the accusations spoken, and not spoken ... I'm sure many can identify with.

And it's also true that often we go into relationships because we want someone to love us, make us feel special, to give us something to identify ourselves by, rather than going into relationships because we have so much love inside us that we want to share with another.

True love ... no it never dies. But I think it can, evolv and altar with time ... but it never goes away. Or it was never true love.

Well done.

[Adel Eyes]

if this is your perception......then yes you captured it.