~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Sophie Wind]

The dialogue is the strike of genius, and I like the colors
However, in the red stanzas the rhymes seem to me strange and a little skimpy sometimes
Overall it was really worth reading

[Dorchadas]

...no it doesn't ~smiles~

I love this... I love the form... the format is so unique but your words are beautiful, so insightful and eloquent.
I love how you tell this story... how it evolves and changes... like a real relationship... I love how it flows so naturally... amazing... thought provoking and very deep

[Dizzy-Izzy]

"Can Love really be defined? Does True Love ever fail us?"

Isn't "true love" the vision of ourselves we see reflected in the eyes of our beloved? So intoxicating... until the mirror reflects images that are less complimentary.

What harder, colder, facts are there to face?

The years spent relating to someone reveal more about who "we" are than anything we might learn about someone else.

Can we stay in the light of such truth? Maybe we should move on? Then we can try yet again, to trick someone else into believing we are something that we're not... so we can keep on fooling ourselves.

"A sour glass of wine" ... indeed.

[Deborah Shepard]

love and relationships beauty

[Passion for Literature]

very thought provoking...actually I separated and read it as 3 different pieces then read it as a whole...

your first stanza sets the scene very nicely...it gives the reader a visual picture.

I believe the dialogue between Jane and John reflects the difference between the way males and females perceive and think...nicely written.

the section near the end, "On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)...What we can 'do/be' for others" I felt your personal thoughts and questions added a lucid perspective on your frame of mind when you embarked on writing this poem.

I love how you give the deep emotion part a place of its own when you set words off in red.

your expression of true love and human relationships is very intuitive and clever!

[Anna]

"SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... "

love that line.....wonderful!
this is a great piece I can see why it's on the most read list!
very nicely done!

[Tovli]

very unique. the format matched the metaphor. the story was compeling and filled with impending plot and fluid purpose. the psychology of the characteriation and relationships was really interesting. nicely done. tovli

[Nassira]

wow, it is my first time noticing this writing! It is a different way of conveying a message. I find it so true and the story sounds familiar. You are really touching the core of an aspect of human psychology as regard as love and its mysteries ... You are amazing with your writing :)))) I'll keep on reading ...
Thank you!

[Michael]

It reads much like a performance. You have a way with mixing things up. You poetry might not be the cup of tea for a purest - it is their loss for for sure. Only by challenging things will they grow. I am encouraged for poetry's future by reading such works.


Great Job!

[Kerri[pollutes]]

my cynical side creeps up