~ True Love ~

~ True Love ~

A Poem by Legacy
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Silent promise once made, left Drowning in a sour glass of wine. Does True Love ever die?

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Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.
 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned
 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other
Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?
Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -
Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?
 
Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”
John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”
 
Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless
Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations
Desire to please; you do not want to possess…
Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!
 
Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”
John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”
 
Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…
Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?
Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  
Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.
 
Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”
John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”
 
Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray
Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'
Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…
To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...
 
Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”
John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”
 
 
 
On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)
We believe this is {True Love}…
 
Is this possible?
Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?
No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.
 
Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?
 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')
 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?
Love...in all facets -
A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…
SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 
Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2011 Legacy


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A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

Posted 16 Years Ago


27 of 28 people found this review constructive.




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very powerful

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

My favourite poem on the website without a doubt! The formatting and the style, the characters and the stanzas in between, it's brilliantly crafted! The poem is ever-inquisitive, challenging us to find our own perceptions and the last line leaves a strong question for the reader to take away. Amazing, truly amazing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Legacy,
Let me say this about this poem....Wow!
I absolutely loved it...not liked...loved
One of the most unique and beautiful poems I have ever read...A great format
I hung on every word...every line...every emotion
the transition from narrative...to dialogue...then back again... was seemless and timeless...
Does True Love ever Die...? not anymore..
allen

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A devine and delightful verse! I love the layout and presentation here! You're a remarkable writer and poet...expressing your emotions with imagery in a heartfelt manner! You should be writing plays or movie scripts!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Fantastic work. Leaves the reader wondering what love really is. The reader really feels for "Jane Doe" from her first dialogue. A person can practically see the argument playing out before their eyes while listening to the silent thoughts. Like she's remembering and thinking about what went wrong.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

this a legacy of its own very good


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 4 people found this review constructive.

You write beautifully. You'll find my comments more personal than critical. I'm not the educated writer I'd like to be. I do though, hear the music in words. I try to write with this in mind. I can hear the music in yours.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I think this is a very good write, an enjoyable read but... true to life? I suppose then, that depends on the life experiences of the reader.
In my experience, my true love did exist. We both made sacrifices happily for each other because we both felt the other was worth it.
Your final question is, does true love ever die? My true love is dead in the physical sense of the word, he died of a heart attack six months ago... yet I still love him. I pray that when my time comes, we'll be together in Heaven someday. Is my love dead? No... and it never will be.

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 4 people found this review constructive.

I have been trying to write poetry in the last few years. Before, I never liked it. But in the last two years I have read thousands of poems by the greats and the unknowns. I am learning. You just taught me a lesson that will stay with me. I read this four times, and may again. This was excellent! Thanks for the lesson~

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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