Darkness

There i sit

on the mountain side like a shadow

trying not to frown

while watching the sunset go down

wind blowing

from side to side

things running all through my mind

dreading the darkness that awiats

as the sun goes down

here it comes

darker and darker it gets

tell theres no light left to see

everyone is forgetting me 

no time left 

days go buy still no light in the sky 

no one remembers but just forgets. 

Reviews

[Hello, Goodbye]

Second time I read this, and I like it very much.. a has a certain haunting sense about it that fills you up with a seductive aloof feeling.. good job..

[crap]

nice poem, i would cut the first line though, the second is a much stronger beginning. I have an idea for the fourth line as well, maybe just "watching the sun go down" it flows better with line 3. good job overall though!