SEA BREEZE

inspired by Justsomewriters-CEG .. just a breezy stream of sea consciousness

SEA BREEZE

 

The misty sea breeze washes over my teardropped eyes

My love is gone and has taken the sands of time away

Taking my hope and trust that don't come easy 

He knew my achille's heart was fragile to the touch

But walked in anyway, with a lover's heart

Dropped me hook, line & sinker

And now the sea with all her waves of silence

Captures me in my solitude as I lay on the beach

And wait for my heart to mend and make ready

for another chance at love, someday

 

©2009 LLR   120309 814A

 

 

Reviews

[Michael G.]

A mountain girl on the beach. A love without a love to love. Time will heal and fix.

This poem has a nice flow to it. The content is consistent throughout the poem. It pulls on heartstrings. Nice write.

[Nautili]

very vulnerable. Time does heal....or at least subside the heartache. Lovely piece.

[Wicahpi]

Wonderfully expressed

[deeps]

This is so beuatiful but yet sad.
Very well expressed!

[A]

Sad beginning with a hopeful, positive ending. Love this piece! Great poem :)

[cest la vie]

Dixie LL-

This is painfully beautiful. I love this line:
"He knew my achille's heart was fragile to the touch"

Yes, sometimes we have to lay back and let the waves wash over us anew.
Great piece!!
Lynne