wait

4 days before I deployed to Afghanistan I had a most wonderful dream that me an my lover were lying in bed together in our home. It was wonderful, and beautiful, but it was a dream. and when I woke I wrote this.

 

I sit on the edge of greatness, I wait,
A soft silk wig at my side, I wait
A war I must go off to before my dress unfurls
A cry of a warrior princess in my mind, I wait
I want the world I cant have yet, So I wait
I want the lover of my dreams, but I wait
I think of her often, as I wait

My tears stain the pillow, I wait

Her voice, a pure water flow I miss, I wait

My mind and body aches, a constant flow of guilt, I wait

I turn my head away in sorrow and pride, I wait
A Pistol and Camera I lift at my side to face the hordes, I wait

Distant shores and fears unknown I stand, I wait

The enemy strong and deadly during the day, my dreams of her the same at night
I say to myself …  I will see her again, I will serve her again

I cry into the pillow, I wait
A year I tell my self, I wait
Closer still, I wait

At the end of the road, I sit and wait

A plane ride home, I wait

 

Together again a silkin in brace

My dream subsides as I am only 4 days from my deployment....

So I sit in the middle of the night, and do the only thing I can.



I wait

Reviews

[CharlieO]

This is a touching and haunting poem - clearly very personal - very well written.
I think your use of repetition worked well - it added to the sense of forboding which your choice of words created. This suspense was also found in your varying line length - especially the final few lines.
Congrats on this write - I see you are a new writer on the site - I hope you enjoy the cafe and find to be a place to inspire your writing.

[St.Jimmy]

Last few lines are really touching and awesome

keep on good work...

[Staci Brown]

After your email 2 days ago and rereading this piece i'm now blown away!!!! there were a couple clues i pondered over on my first read which gave me pause and wondered exactly what they meant..., now it all makes perfect sense!!!

in my list of writings i have a poem titled My Miracle that i wrote about my daughter who i adopted. she served with you in Afghanistan... She too shares our path...

i'm happy you made it back alive young lady! you have nothing to prove to anyone hon... time for you to enjoy life and blossom! :D

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[Staci Brown]

ahhh the joys of "hurry up and wait" that we all experience where the military is concerned! lol

this was a really nice insight into your mind just before deployment to a foreign soil and the war that awaits... a personal cameo for you, but thoughts and feelings many can relate to just as well.

Welcome to the Cafe!

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)