i need you to understand

this is something that has been a long run in the making, im still making small edits on it to make sure its a 100% my own poem.

 

I need you to understand

That my anxiety isn't a mind trick

A mind trick is

 manipulation

Tricking them into deception

I need you to understand

That my head uses my anxiety

As a mechanism to trick me into thinking...

That nothing is alright.

It takes the small problems

And

Twists them into something

Much

Much

Bigger than it really is...

I need you to understand

That my depression...

Is not an excuse…

An excuse is a statement or false information

That someone gives to whomever to get out of

A satiation...

DEPRESSION

Is a never-ending life sentence with no chance of parole..

I need you to understand..

That my bad days will not last

But my good days will become more

My “mood swings” will start to fade

And

 

That beautiful, passionate, women

Will

Show her face to you once again

All you need to do

Is

Understand..

 

Author's Note

please note that im still editing this but i am open to hearing how i can make this better so please dont shy to message me with a idea for it.

Reviews

[WolfDurican]

To start with, this poem is very well balanced and the way in which it takes an example of what people say about these things and then points out how they're false works well. The repetition works very well in this poem as well, and I appreciate how it ends on a happier note despite speaking of something that tends to simply be dour.

The problems with this poem that I see are more technical, such as how in the last stanza the word 'women' is used where it seems like you're going for 'woman', but seeing as you're editing this still, I want to believe you'd have caught this on your own.

I'm often told myself that ellipses aren't attractive. I don't have a problem with them, but at the same time, I believe this poem could do well even without them. Even so, if you choose to keep them, please make sure that there are three periods on all of them.
I hope this was helpful in some way.

[Robert Trakofler]

So well put! Dear heart, a familiar pleading in those words and very honest sentiments very touching.