As Beautiful as a Rainbow

It's black with lace so long
It has black hair like the waves of a roaring sea

It cries each night from the events of the day
She cries for love from a white

She originates from Africa and is abused
People bully her for her vivid color

She yearns for love from someone
Someone who will adore and appreciate her

But one gruesome day someone comes up to her
And says how beautiful she is

She slaps the boy thinking how the boy bullies
But the boy means no harm but to be her friend

Later the boy comes up to her again
With a smile so faint

He has a red fingerprint on his cheek that the African girl recognizes

The African girls name is Amaya, she tells the boy
They start to understand each other and realize how

They don't have to be enemies any longer
Nor frenemies either.

Later they start to see each other more often
And people start to tease and look down on the boy

But he doesn't care and just fights back

Their first kiss is on their wedding day
Their first child was a year later

And to this day they are best friends
To this day they are married

To this day they love each other
And to this day people look up to them

Author's Note

-l.k.

Reviews

[dan]

It seems as if you and I were already friends. I chose this poem of yours to review and found this old review already here. A small world...dan

[wordman]

every one deserves true love a beautiful write

[Jamestown]

Beautiful write, to follow the heart and not allow anyone's opinion
matter is fantastic, let love conquer and hate stay dead in it's place
where it belongs, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[dan]

Chain, Two people taking on the monster known as racial intolerance; this struggle goes on everywhere, every day...a relationship becomes stronger when the two people unite against the forces wishing to hold them down. It's nice to see a piece end with triumph over hatred and those who carry it with them. take care...dan

[MomzillaNC]

A lovely tale of overcoming distrust and bigotry.

NOTES: I recommend tweaking this one for language and grammar.

[Chain of Hearts]

I'm a little confused by the part in your review where u say 'tweaking it for language and grammar..' What in this poem are you referring too?

[MomzillaNC]

The language and grammar are distant and awkward at times in trying to maintain third person narrative. I recommend reading other poetry written from the third person perspective.

[Chain of Hearts]

If you are thinking about the first few lines: It's black with lace so long
It has black hair like the waves of a roaring sea

It cries each night from the events of the day
She cries for love from a white

...I made that on purpose to show the relevance between treating a black person with respect and treating them as a human rather than making them look and feel like a thing

[Afraa]

How in the hell did this poem not get ONE view from January 11, up until now?! Sorry, don't mind me.

This poem subconsciously put a smile on my face. It is very genuine and beautiful, hence why its going on my favorites. I loved the description in this poem; it had me immersed. This would have made a great story, or a book! But its your work, you decide what to do with it. Thank you for sharing such a lovely piece.

-Afraa

[Chain of Hearts]

Afraa, I'm actually working right now on a screenplay/script on this poem.
Thank you for your kind words, I appreciate every thought and opinion you share.
+If you are wondering, I will probably be finished the script in a couple weeks, maximum time would be a month.
Feel free to check often on my account for the script as it will be shared soon after I finish it.

-Chain of Hearts