Two Steps

a dance with my devil

progress is forward until it is back

two steps

for every one that I lack

then we will see what we will find

never be free from whats on your mind

progress is forward until it is back

two steps

for every one that I lack

still I maintain and hold the ground

despite the terrible stain that I found

progress is forward until it is back

two steps

for every one that I lack

my love and joy were used, depleted

But I will always refuse to be defeated

progress is forward until it is back

two steps

for every one that I lack

two steps

for every one that I lack

Author's Note

go on, knock me down again, it only motivates me rise back up


{may be a work in progress}

Reviews

[Ms. Gruye]

i think the sparseness employed is mediated by the constant repetition of:

progress is forward until it is back
two steps
for every one that I lack

however, in that light--these are perfect Radiohead lyrics--or a folk song--or Irish pub song.

viva la

[Shutterbug]

This seems very familiar. I totally understand this dance and know it very well. Keep dancing and hopefully it will change to something a little better. One step at a time. Very nice.

[Emily B]

progress is always progress, and sometimes we have to backtrack a little to make sure we learned the lessons

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem as is. The poem is a feeling we all feel. It seem we cannot get ahead but always trying to catch-up. Flow and words made this a fun poem to read.Thank you.
Coyote

[Subjective Sanity]

If you do any tweeking at all, this part could flow just a tiny bit better. Maybe fewer syllables but, still BRILLIANT!

"my love and joy were used, depleted
But I will always refuse to be defeated"

[Subjective Sanity]

I love it! I am going to give you a compliment that may not sound like one but, I repeat: This is a compliment in the sincerest form. You know me and my sick sense of humor so you know that when I say this I mean I REALLY LIKE IT! Here it goes...

It sounds like a pissed off, drunk, fed up Dr. Seuss... and it's BRILLIANT!!!!

[Ed Hart]

well, that's what we are, works in progress...and progress in this is always a wobbly walk...