At the end

As my awakening live
has just given permission
to start,
nothing seems to be
entwined
when I overheard
an elder share wisdom
and laugh.

A couple of blinks
of my eyes,
and years have passed,
and my peace
has been drained
by worries of a
modern life.

My heart has been
broken many times,
and I was blind
to see the people that
wanted to give me
a chance.

Life is a trip,
no just a game
to mess around with.

Sadly, some of us
see this too late.

I forgot what my mission
was in the first place,
but even though
I'm not done yet,
I hope, when
I use the stars
as steps of a
heavenly stair
to reach God's gaze,
my mission is accomplished
and my flaws vanished.

Reviews

[Jogi Hull]

"I hope, when
I use the stars
as steps of a
heavenly stair
to reach God's gaze,
my mission is accomplished
and my flaws vanished."


^Speaking to me on a subconscious level so profound
thoroughly enjoyed

[s y e]

This is a great write, Lee (forgot to ask, can I call you that? :P) I loved the flow and the journey you took us on, some lovely, true lines here. Awesome.

~ Noodle. ~

[Leandro Mendez]

you've been calling me that for a while now hahah it's cool :) thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed :)

[s y e]

Yes I know but I forgot to ask! xD Whoops, sorry!

[DCT ponderings]

Leandro fabulous final stanza. For I too.....
I forgot what my mission
was in the first place,
but even though
I'm not done yet,
I hope, when
I use the stars
as steps of a
heavenly stair
to reach God's gaze,
my mission is accomplished
and my flaws vanished.

This journey is an interesting one. In the first stanza did you mean to say "As my awakening life
has just given permission"? Life not Live.

[Leandro Mendez]

thank you so much!! always glad you enjoy :) and yeah first stanza mistake, I am human after all right? may be, hahah

[annabellee]

Really nice poem, it has a nice flow and is very true. I loved the last stanza. Well penned :)

[Leandro Mendez]

thank you :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[writer in trial]

nicely written. :)
Its so true.
Why we realize things so late and often commits mistake ignoring the right ones and allowing the wrong ones in our life:(
This is a nice poem.

[Leandro Mendez]

thank you :)