This light

This light, oh secret morning stillness
When I can see my breath
And hold the sky
Counting the distance
Between you and I
Quiet steps I take through golden fields
And I wake in calm
I am the eye
As well as the storm
And I have been following you in my dreams
Bursting to breathe in endlessly through these seams

This light, oh secret morning stillness
When I can see my breath
And hold the sky
Counting the distance between you and I

Reviews

[emmajoy]

So peaceful, so beautiful .. as if you'd caught a misted moment.

'When I can see my breath
And hold the sky'

Just one thing: you use the word 'you' twice, but in the tenth line you've put 'him', maybe alter the latter ..

[Jeff]

I really like the imagery you use in your poems.