Sonnet 1

The shine in your eyes I cannot mistake.

For your love, like the sun, sparkles so bright,

That you leave me in such a silly state.

Will you hold me throughout the freezing night?

And though I say those things I do not mean,

My harsh words filled with belittling spite,

You keep me whole and treat me like a queen.

Will you hold me throughout the freezing night?

Words cannot express my love. Try? I might.

Will you hold me throughout the freezing night?

Author's Note

My boyfriend requested I write something for him, and he chose a poem. Shakespearean sonnet in iambic pentameter? I think so!

Reviews

[Seshat Nidaba]

I like cheesy myself, my favorite line was

1.Words cannot express my love. Try? I might.

I've never actually seen a question mark in the middle of a sonnet, but I'd expect nothing less from you.

I long to write the perfect love poem, but sometimes I don't think I possess enough virtue.

[Sami Khalil]

Nice poem
Good job.

[WhiteWillow]

This is a very nice piece, well done.

[MAC]

i loved this. sonnet was the perfect choice. excellent write.

[realmwriter]

Hes a lucky man I am sure...Hope he knows that! Very well written.

[SkinlessFrank]

What else is there but love and passion.

[lovepoet]

"belittling spite"

Fabulous!

I hope that he appreciates you.

[Coffee Vampier]

"The shine in your eyes I cannot mistake.
For your love, like the sun, sparkles so bright"

I love that line it bring in the mood... it reminds me of what a beautiful sight it is to behold.

[Adam :P]

aww what a good love poem

[Cynthia]

Well, I guess I don't know much about Shakespearean, however, I love this poem much! Its a very beautiful poem, and the flow is great, and the love you pour in this poem, I love it so much. It kinda shines while I read it, this is amazing!
So sweet, simple, and so lovely....
Nice Job!