A Bad Poem

A very bad poem... Don't say I didn't warn you!

Oh; what   todo

my   peoms r bad!

The speling, atrocious:

the imagry, sad!

My meet her is off,

My    metafors stail,

and, so, many, commas

they'll put  I in jail

I found a   thesaurus 

and ratify prestigious lexicon

***that means 'use good words'

shoot, there goes the flow: and nothing rhymes wit lexicon

Endless   oceans of Luv,

Me' passions' aflame!

I vomit emotions;

the world is to blame!

My grammar is crap

And da last straw

I'm not good at rhyming

Not even at all!!!!!!!!

Author's Note

I would love constructive criticism? ;)

What do you think?

Let's see how many people get the intent...

Reviews

[Aethereal]

Magnificent! You composed this poem perfectly since it got its intended message across, and transferred the emotional mood of the writer to the reader. This poem followed his own rules, rules that anyone may follow if they enjoy following rules. You’re the master of your domain. Readers have the ability to read in between the lines, and/or form psychological gestalts from scattered fragments. Some poems are ink-blot tests that expose the personality of the reader who interprets them.

[LawrenceRaybon]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it!

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! I would write a few gestalt poems of my own if I was working for the Psychology department of a university, but not here. I just don't want to play games with reader's heads on here. The Bible is a gestalt, and an ink blot test all in one, anachronistic Psychology.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I love this poem! You really had fun with literature here I enjoyed it immensely beautiful rhythm well done overall!

[Rita L. Sev]

*fighting the urge to whip out my red pen* LOL! Witty stuff here, Lawrence - I love it!

[Susan C. Allen]

I think it's fabulous and fun and witty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

eye thawt this wass pritty goode...
a musing!

it dus half a fue grammer airers...butt fixe that problime and thiss pome mite b pub less able.

jacob

[Ifreakinloveyou]

Haha, I love this :) I really enjoy reading your poems because you're refreshingly creative and always entertaining!!! Thank you so much for posting!

[LawrenceRaybon]

Awww, now I'm blushing ;) Thank you for the kind review!