Be Happy!

Written for a friend having a terrible day...

Be happy!

Not because things could be worse.

Be happy!

But not the reverse!

 

Be happy!

You know the skies will be blue.

Be happy!

Because the sun will smile too!

 

Be happy!

Because it sucks being sad!

Be happy!

Because it’s good to be glad!

 

Be happy!

Because, well, dragons fart!

Be happy!

Because Blueberry Muffin's a tart!

 

Be happy!

Because I’m silly as hell!

Be happy!

So I know that you’re well!

 

Be happy!

Is that a smile I see?

Be happy!

Well, it looks good to me!

Be Happy!

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Return of the clown nose! :D

Favorite stanza is the hell-well rhymed one. Favorite line "dragons fart" of course.

The first and last stanzas (and the last line of the penultimate stanza) are the only that don't use Because to start the even lines.

Consider not making any changes, having more becauses, or having less becauses. (MWAHA. All possibilities must be considered BWAHAAHAH)
-For instance. "Then the sun will smile too" "If you do the sun smiles too"
- I draw your attention to the becauses, because I personally found it distracting - that is not to say that other less writing-tutor-brained people will be bothered by this. You may want to wait for more opinions before making any radical changes.

Fantastic formatting. I'm inspired to put more effort than adjusting font size into mine.

And now for the flattery, hold on to your ego. Awesome poem. Made me grin. Still like "The Story" best, but this one up there. I like the repetition that doesn't get old. I like the straight forward rhyme scheme. I like the conversational-casual feel.

Random consideration. The last three stanza next to Blueberry Muffin I presume could be more right-aligned. That would make the central orientation of the last line stand out more.

[LawrenceRaybon]

Thanks for the review!
As far as the becauses, what if I change the blue skies line to, "You know the skies will be blue" and then the first couple and last couple of stanzas are mirrors of each other?

The formatting was kind of an accident. I didn't think people would get the pun with the word tart so I added the girl. But just adding the girl made the poem lopsided so I added the sun and, voila, it looked pretty good...

When writing this a tune akin to YMCA was going through my head, the parts that start with 'Young man'. If you want to, listen to that part of YMCA and then starting with the second 'Be Happy' substitute 'Be Happy' for 'Young Man' in the tune and then just repeat the musical phrase as you read each part. I've been literally humming and singing this since I wrote it. I got a lot of weird looks in Whole Foods. But if I caught someone staring I just sang to them and they went away... Maybe I don't have a good singing voice...

[C. Rose]

Yay symmetry! Plus one less because somehow makes it not overbearing.

I was watching a movie today where the father gets in a train crash at the beginning. At the end the son was on a train and I started chanting "train crash train crash" to the horror of my friends. I tried explaining how beautiful the symmetry would be but they ran away from my logic like a person runs away from a stranger singing in Whole Foods.

[Zahra]

hahah cool one. Really made me smile. It represents the mood and message very well. I enjoyed a lot. Going to read again

[Abdul Alsaaidi]

It made me smile and happy too .... your little poem is something new

[Mercy Fae]

This made me laugh. Thank you

[LawrenceRaybon]

You are quite welcome!