Crayon

A crayon in my hand

New worlds to create

And the wall in front of me

A big blank slate

Reviews

[Matt Thomas]

Lawrence...I must say your photo does you no justice in the way you write...I am very blunt and straight forward when it comes to my reviews...Usually when I come across such a small write like this I just skip it or give it a zero...But you my friend have stuffed so much meaning into only 20 words!!! The description you give is like that of a childs imagination...And I have never seen anybody go this far into such a terrific description in, yes 20 WORDS!!! This is absolutely amazing Lawrence!! I must say if you put more wording into it it wouldn't be as brilliant and I probably would've given this a 75 but the talent of a writer is using each and every word like a powerful weapon of description and yours are nuclear bombs!! Excellent job!! If you want to review my project it would be appreciated but great stuff

[LawrenceRaybon]

Matt, thank you for your kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. And as for the photo, I don't have many photos of myself and the one shown is the most recent one I have. If you really want a jarring experience try reading my poem 'Fade' while thinking of the photo...

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Sounds like the start to a fun poem you should carry it on!

[lissalovesyou]

Sometimes less is more. Proved by your poem. So much is implied. Thank you for entering it in my contest.
lissalovesyou:)

[Zahra]

such a lovely poem. I pictured a child holding a Crayon. Loved the way it spoke of creativity and exploring. Very nice

[Utkarsh Singh]

sir can u plz teach me how to write a poem within 30 words???

[LawrenceRaybon]

Start with Haiku and Senryu. They will help you think about compressing ideas into small forms. From there you can experiment. All it takes is practice!

[Utkarsh Singh]

ok n thank you very much

[Savannah Bly]

This is a piece. Profound, beautiful, fresh, original, inventive, insightful in its simplicity. Well done. A really great piece. One of my favorites of yours so far!

[Rachelle]

And have my Mom come after me
Scrubbing the walls unhappily

[Baby Ricochet]

Graffiti art rules...........

[Relic]

You could always buy a can of paint if it doesn't work out. ha This actually has the tone of one with a lot of enthusiasm and adventure in their heart. Good for you. Nice poem.

[LawrenceRaybon]

Thanks! I'm glad you like it. I wrote it for my three year old nephew and included it with some art supplies for his birthday last year.

[Relic]

Wow, sounds like a thoughtful thing to do. I'm sure he's very happy. You're welcome.