Insomnia pt. II

Swimming raw through seas of shattered glass

with a leaky bag of salt upon my back.

Thanks for yet another lovely evening.

Reviews

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Alright. So, the first two lines depict something outside of the dream world, I believe, thus giving allusion to the reason for a sleepless night. Obviously the reason is some form of torture that requires the narrator to cast off his own illusions and get out of his own way while carrying a (vile) burden, seemingly small, but intense. Then, with the "Thanks" the narrator has accredited another sentient force for his suffering (insomnia). Therefore, I am led to accuse what would be closest to home, e.g., family and lovers. Reading this one makes me wish to revise my review of part one, but it's best you get my thoughts on first, separate sight (as that is how you are presenting them). I would see the first as more about insomnia and less about sleep, however, was it conjoined with the second.

[Nautili]

not sure I am getting your intention with this one, but the imagery is interesting.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well, the torture must be refreshing.