If I Died Young

I was reading an Undertaker Fanfic on Fanfiction.net called 'If I died young' and go inspired....at 6:00 in the morning. Somedays are better than others, I guess.

If I died young, 
Would you be there?
If I died young, 
Would you even care?
If I died young,
Would people stop and stare
At the dead young girl 
With bruises everywhere?
If I died young,
Would you mourn for me?
If I died young,
Would you still consider me family?
If I died young,
Never to age,
Would you look at the killer 
In a blind rage?
If I died young,
Would you even care?
If I died young,
Would people stop and stare
At the dead young girl 
With bruises everywhere?
If I died young,
Who would you blame?
Look in there mirror at my killer
Because you both are one and the same
If I died young, 
Would you mourn for me?
Even if the killer
Is amoungst my family?
If I died young 

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems and all that good stuff. This is a poorly-writtrn piece of work on my part.

Reviews

[No name]

I don't really pay attention to grammar or spelling so I didn't find anything wrong with it. The repetition gave it a wonderful flow and I love the simplicity of it. It was an awesome poem, I don't know you find it not to be good but it truly is.

[Boldpen]

I don't know if that's your worst written poem... so what will be your standard for Good!!!!!!!
Well done!.. I liked the repetition of words that gave the piece a sudden and flawless flow. Very clever use of simple words.
I don't know about grammar... but I liked the poem's spirit. Great Job!