Misty-eyed Girl

Confronting yourself

Hey there,
You misty-eyed girl
I know you and those eyes
I'm all too familiar
I've worn them myself
You're feeling pretty crestfallen, huh?
All your cards were down
You bared yourself
Peeled away layers
And eventually you were naked
In every sense
Hey there,
You misty-eyed girl
I know you and that smile
I've had one of those before
That smile that wasn't much happy at all
It's one of those, "tragic smiles"
That are only tragic because
The sincerity and luster;
Radiance,
Passed away
Hey there,
You misty-eyed girl
I know who you are
You're not weak because you bared yourself
That's honest
You're no crestfallen tragedy
I promise
So hey there, you misty-eyed girl
Don't cry for tears that already fell
Take pride in your story and make it yours to tell
I know you

Reviews

[Chris]

Mirrors often lie when THEY talk to us... and yet we can't seem to lie when WE talk to them - sigh, go figure.

So many like "Line Dancing" -
at a point it becomes mindless,
breath-taking, body-shuffling,
soul-numbingly ...automatic...
and there's only "I's" -
trying so hard to MIRROR
other "I's"
'til the "attraction" ends
and each floats away -
flotsam ...lost...
in the "see" of life.

Chris

[poetgurl]

Such a heart tugging write, I like this write it's very emotional

[Laurierose]

This came from a particularly reflective piece from me. I appreciate such a kind and honest review.

[poetgurl]

not a problem

[Rebecca J Martin]

I love this! I'm not familiar with all styles of poetry... did you follow a style?

[Laurierose]

Thank you! And no, there was no specific style for this. I typically utilize free verse, though.

[Rebecca J Martin]

That's awesome... cuz it almost looks artistic!!! I typically free-style as well... I would eventually like to learn different ones and use them in my writings :). Great poem though!

[Laurierose]

Aw thank you! I've actually used this format in another poem I published on here, it's called Out of My League, but I just made it up myself (ha ha). It's great to experiment with different styles; I also love haikus. Thanks again.

[Rebecca J Martin]

that's the BEST kind of formatting!!!! the one's self-created ;)

[Crowley]

Great advice, sometimes when we can only see our small picture world it takes the voices of others to back it up and let the big picture become available again. This writing does that in spades. Loved it!

[Laurierose]

Exactly. When we hold up a mirror to ourselves, we'd be surprised at who we really see. Thanks for reading.

[Annabella]

This is well written, has a fantastic message and is across-the-board amazing.

[Laurierose]

Thank you! I appreciate the warm review.

[Effie]

I think I've had this conversation with a lady in my mirror. This is written well and very interesting. I enjoyed this very much.

[Laurierose]

Thanks so much

[Serendipity Planet]

Yes , I actually know that girl