Are You Asleep?

I spend my time, 

When you are gone, 

Just listening, 

To a favourite song, 

Or gazing somewhere, 

Up above, 

Or write a sonnet, 

Words of love, 

They tumble, tortured, 

From the sky, 

I’m feeling low, 

And feeling high, 

Distracted, 

That’s the way to be, 

I watch a movie, 

On the telly, 

I catch the news, 

On bbc1, 

Storm and tempest, 

Strike again, 

So difficult, 

To contemplate, 

They’re queuing up, 

At Heaven’s Gate, 

I sit a while, 

Commiserate, 

And say a prayer, 

It’s getting late, 

And thankful now, 

For you and me, 

Discard the scene, 

That’s on the telly

And in the quiet, 

Time to weep, 

Where are you now? 

Are you asleep?

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

I really enjoyed your flow and pace here, it lyrically pulled me through your poem.

[John Anderson]

this is so beautifully expressed and finely penned.

[Rene Velez]

A good write vwith nice content, somber and real.

[micky]

Heartbreaking, But I love the piece well done Laurie:P!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so sad...I still live as if we are together...I wait upon your arrival...set in my denial...

and then the realization...I am alone...and I wonder where you are and if you are resting comfortably, without me.

[Patrick]

This is perfectly penned and beautifully said!

[Tricia Pattinson]

Nicely written. Delivers a variety of emotions with its narration.

[R Smith]

I like the pace and rhyme of this, a sad tale of distant love, beautifully written Laurie

[Frieda P]

It's a frenetic read, the frustration is palpable, well done Laurie.

[Anne Timmins]

The content is so emotional. You have expressed yourself very well. The title pulls a reader in.