The Last Cough Before The Grave

When love is dead

we note the lie

that is blatant in the corpse.

Limbs that once appeared to dance

are now seen to have been

twitching their last, long twitch.

That which seemed once

to have been an eternity

is now revealed as a spasm

between the spank of life

and the last cough before the grave.

Reviews

[micky]

I love the dark sense it has Laurie well done :P

[R Smith]

Grim words Laurie but put together in this way they become a poem of strength and beauty, bravo my friend

[Deepwater]

very dark writing, Thanks for sharing! keep writing

[Jeremy Baker]

I loved the image of the spasm of the corpse ... very dark writing, and very enjoyable to read! Thanks for sharing!

[Anne Timmins]

This is a nice and thoughtful piece

[John Anderson]

Very nicely done and a poem I can certainly relate to. Enjoyed it much

[K Scott Smith]

I simply like what you have to say. This piece has good form and flow. Nicely conveyed

[Vito]

A truly heartfelt write. This is deeply touching with meaning, and emotion. The flow is smooth

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i thought love was eternity a few times...but alas...it was just a spasm...

love "the spank of life"---excellent wording.

[MomzillaNC]

Eloquent and true words. Well crafted.