The Last Cough Before The Grave

When love is dead

we note the lie

that is blatant in the corpse.

Limbs that once appeared to dance

are now seen to have been

twitching their last, long twitch.

That which seemed once

to have been an eternity

is now revealed as a spasm

between the spank of life

and the last cough before the grave.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

This is very deep and emotionally impacting. They way you describe the words with a dark, yet beautiful tone is exquisite. Thank you for sharing.

[Patrick]

You have such a way with the word my friend. I am so impressed. This message is beautiful and I loved the title.

[Susan Beth Horvath]

This piece has a lot of reflection in it, a look inward as well as backward.

[Mary Bosworth]

You have such a unique style and a way of presenting surprise in your poetry. So well done

[Blake Fodor]

Very nicely expressed sentiments

[J.Nico]

A poem easily read twice, triwce and more
with the meaning sinking in deeper and deeper each pass.
Love isn't to blame, after all, he's dead...
Was it the love's passing that gave back the insight, the wisdom, the clear view? One wonders...
Very good poem. Straight to the core!

[Matching Socks]

Excellent words and imagination Laurie.
I love this one!

[Mary C]

I love this one a lot. It is so simple and contemporary. great job

[Tricia Pattinson]

Great and impressive piece. The imagery and flow are perfect. I love it!

[Hasan Hersi]

Very Gothic because of the words you used such as corpse. The mood and tone is recognizable instantly. I really like it!