Through the Window

Hold fast, young lovers 
Keep your affections 
Engrave them onto marble walls of memory. 
Remember those moments - 
That embrace you love so well 
For you, as i have, may want to live them again 
Linger in his touch, drown in her scent 
Sink into those memories 
And the loss may subside for a while.

Author's Note

help me think of a title, if you can? [EDIT] found the title this morning when I woke up

Reviews

[MrJodie]

Well, the word "regret" comes to mind. How about "mea culpa?"

I really enjoy this poem. It's full of the longing that comes with age but has a little youthful ardor, as well.

I like the fact that you admit being OCD about your stuff in your description, BTW. So many of us just have to work it over before we can let it go. Don't worry about that so much, here, though. You'll get a lot of good comments, even on stuff that's unfinished. Don't be afraid to ask for help!

~ Jodie

[Karina]

i like it a lot.
"Engrave them onto marble walls of memory." is a great line because of the consonance etc.

[Lily E. Lin]

When I read this, longing comes to mind, as does regret and desire. A certain sadness of having had and lost in the context of giving advice to another pair of lovers not yet broken. The title that comes to mind for me is "Remembering the Love." Don't know if that helps, I won't feel bad if you don't like it. Good piece, all in all, definitely contains strong emotions.