Two Insecure Lovers

The first time we made love

you put your clothes back on straight after

as if we had just done it

in the toilet of a seedy club

my lack of self-esteem told me

that it was because you thought my body was ugly

but it took me months to realise

that it was because you hated yours.

 

I didn’t understand

because I had never seen anything more beautiful

than your un-clothed body

and I had never felt anything more perfect

than when you were lying naked on top of me

but then I realized

that maybe this is what you feel like

when you tell me that I’m pretty

and I tell you not to lie.

 

We are just two insecure lovers

who found beauty in each other

and now after we make love

we leave our clothes off.

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

A great poem about insecurity and trust.
A very nice piece of writing.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thank you for entering this poetry in my little contest.
Please understand that I cannot comment now as this would be unfair to other entries.
I shall return after the contest ends.
Best regards.
Clive.

[Madalyn Beck]

Beautiful. Yes, clothes off, indeed! This is a beautiful write! (:

[NK]

'we leave our clothes off'
nothing gets barer, than this:)

[wordman]

well you have made an acomplishment

[Lyn Anderson]

This is so awesome. We make assumptions based on our false perceptions of self, never bothering to ask the other the reason behind their actions. What an excellent piece.

[Brook]

I think this is beautiful. It does take a while to become comfortable with someone, no matter how much you love them, you find it hard to reveal yourself properly. Once you've seen everything of one another, there's nothing left to hide. Great job, Laura. x0

[Ruth]

Takes time to be comfortable with another...trust and affection in many ways, exploring the heart and mind too, only then can we be comfy x

[genocide]

a good love poem i like it