I Wish I Could Say That This Is The Last Poem I Will Ever Write About You

Another poem about my sister

Ever since the day you left me

Time has moved in slow motion

And the nights have been long and sleepless

My pillows soaked with tears filled with memories of you

So I guess it’s true that time flies when you are having fun

Because I was always happier when you were around

 

I used to hate it when you would brush my hair in the morning before school

Now I would do anything to have you yank and pull at my hair again

Because nothing hurts more than losing you

And I even miss all those names you used to call me

Because at least then I knew you was thinking about me

 

I know that I mean nothing to you now

And I am trying to forget about you too

But how can I, when you had me twisted around your little finger for so long

Tighter than a snake that coils around your neck

 

And there has never been a time that I have looked at a photograph of you and not thought “I miss you”

If you were here right now

I would forgive you in a heartbeat

Even though I know you wouldn’t say you were sorry 

Reviews

[annabellee]

Sad but yet beautiful poem. Very emotional.
Well done :)

[Rose of many colours]

So this child was well taken care of, and has hate in her mind for a mother of some one who nurtured her. Some times ignorance makes us fools.You have express a lot of feelings into this piece.I admire the honesty and true life setting being displayed. I hope you understand where I am coming from also Now I get it this piece is linked with "transformed'

[Laura Harrison]

again, about my sister ;)

[Rose of many colours]

Ha ha, You catch me there but bless your heart, Is She Ok..

[Laura Harrison]

I don't know if she's ok, i haven't seen her for 3 years...

[Rose of many colours]

It is sad ,But please have an open mind she may be lost and cant find her way back just say a word of prayer I feel for you both

[May Flowers]

very strong emotions, my only suggestion is to change "was" to "were" in the last line of the second stanza. Other than that, great job!

[Laura Harrison]

i did put it as 'were' at first, but word told me it was wrong!

[MsJewel]

There is pain and sorrow here, but I could feel the love as well. Well written! :) Julie

[MCS]

Lovely in all its sadness
I’m sorry you’re hurt
Use this pain as a place to write from but don’t build your house here

[Aaron the Baron]

We let ourselves go through so much pain for love. Even if it may not be perfect. good write.

[Jordan]

A really good poem with strong emotions...