Demons

What didn’t kill me

Didn’t make me stronger

I don’t know if I can hold on much longer

My reality is a nightmare

I know they say life isn’t fair

But I’ve never known pain this hard

How can I get back to the start?

 

For the past few months I have been living in a hole

I don’t know how long it will take

To make me feel whole once more

Will I ever defeat this war?

 

As I take hold of the blade

I am no longer afraid

I watch as my blood pours down the drain

And washes all of my sins away

Just one more cut to keep the demons at bay

 

But when it’s all over

I am still not alright

And the demons keep me awake all night

As I eventually drift off to sleep

I hope that I never wake up

Because all my life does is wake me weep

And all I ever do is screw things up

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a great write, and one which needs to be told, to help others.

[WizardsAffliction]

The subject matter is gruesome and the details are vivid. Excellent work on those two elements. However, I think you tried too hard with the rhyme scheme. I know that's pretty much everyone's cup of tea when they pursue poetry, but there's much more to it than that.

Try experimenting with words and playing with the language to eliminate cliches and spur up something that's original, even exclusive to your "voice."

This is well done! :D

Hope this helps and happy trails! :D

[Sarah Lynn]

Such a powerful poem! So deep and filled with so much emotion ! I really just love your writing ! Never stop!

[Hitchhiker]

Never was a cutter, but I understand how a person can be one. No, I took me and my darkness on the road. A lot of roads. For twenty years I lived on the mean streets of America except for an occasional shack-up job, and two marriages thrown in for good luck. The marriages were doomed to fail, as you said in your poem I failed a lot. I carried my demons until one day it was clear to me what I needed to do to rid myself of them. I did it. I've been happy ever since. Hang in there, you'll find your way to clearing your dark thoughts.

[hmarieee]

This poem is similar to the one I wrote, Demons. I like it and I love how the blade and the Demons intertwine. Not feeling in control is hard and feeling like all you do is screw up is very relatable. This is a great poem, good job.
-hannahmarie xo

[Laura Harrison]

oh yeah! and the titles are the same too, i promise i didn't copy off you haha :) thank you my dear x

[hmarieee]

Oh no worries, besides I would look at it as more inspiration than anything. Anytime, I love your writing.