He Said

He Said

A Poem by Laura3841

He said he loves me

But we need some time apart

I said I'd be here

Waiting for him to come back

Till I saw him with that blonde.

© 2014 Laura3841


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Laura3841
This poem is a Tanka

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That's a succint poem in which very few words convey the whole story of where its going to end. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Laura3841

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Madhu :)
A very strong poem. A beginning and a dead-end. The blonde make the story have the final chapter. Good use of words and thoughts. A complete poem is so few words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


Laura3841

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Coyote!
Nicely done… we need to know when to let go, and that is certainly a clear sign.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Laura3841

10 Years Ago

Absolutely Rock And Roll Cowboy :) Thanks for reading and reviewing my little poem.
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

10 Years Ago

Twas my pleasure.

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Laura3841
Laura3841

McKinney, TX



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