Here, Now and Forever

I feel you inside me

Slowly changing me

The way I feel,

Think.

Nothing is the same since you touched me

Do you feel it to?

I ask myself.

Do you feel the burning?  

When we are close together?

Do your insides melt when we kiss?

My head is spinning,

With these thoughts

You’re changing me.

It scares me.

But the look you have in your eyes

When we gaze deep into each others eyes

I know that you love me too.

And somehow,

Against all the odds that we meant to be together.

Here,

Now and

Forever.

Author's Note

Not really sure if this works.... But i just really need to get back into writing. I hope this is ok. plz comment :)

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A nice poem.
I like the lines:
Against all odds that we meant to be together.

[OR]

I love this one
Nice job

[Nothing Personal]

This one's a genuine, straightforward expression after being touched by love. The look in your eyes, the kiss that melts the inside all this is so real. The poem's sensual and passionate. Liked it. Good work. Great way to come back to writing LOL :-)

[PaperHearts]

Wow, this was a really beautiful write. I really liked the directness of this piece, and thought that you evoked the passion and love involved in a relationship in a subtle yet convincing way. I thought that the pace and flow of this piece was effortless and effective, and that the placement of the last three lines made for a perfect ending. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Kes]

Cool. Laura, you got something here. Because i love you and want you to be the best, i'd suggest you tweak the rhythm a little, make sure it all flows nicely.
I have to say, (you know my cheeky mind) this was full of innuendos - if you look at it that way... ;)
Anyway, great stuff! And I hope this isn't based on truth, or you've got some serious explaining to do!

[Anicca]

It most certainly does work, its a stunning piece and really reflects the fact that every single person that we encounter changes us, I believe this to be true, but thats just my opinion. Nicely penned though, thanks for sharing.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really love this. Very very good.

[Charles]

I think you gave us an honest description of your experience and that always works. I like to see some more imagery but beyond that it is a nice read.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

"Do you feel it to?" maybe there's supposedly a double o at the to...
overall?
I like it so much, this is actually the condition I'm in now...

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I think this is your best piece so far..it conveys a great visual image and i love the idea of someone getting under your skin and changing your ways even if it's unnerving...it's exciting...well done