Death and All His Friends

Inspired by something close to my heart....

What happened here?

This place use to so be safe

Our sanctuary.

What happened here?

It’s the home to a blood bath now

And always will be.

What happened here?

Death happened here

Lives ended,

Cut short.

That’s what happened here.

One man and his gun lost the safety I use to feel here.

The spill of blood,

The bang of the gun.

All this happened here.

It changed our lives forever

I don’t know what the future holds for me and you.

All I know now is,

Our lives will never be the same again.

No one can change what happened here….

 

Author's Note

Ok this is my first try at poetry. Plz, plz comment and tell me what u think. Also it kinda just repeats alot but oh well! sorry about the disturbing pic.

Reviews

[Misty Blue Eyes]

This is brilliant my friend...loved it

[Anicca]

This is brilliant, you should definately write more poetry, if this is just your first attempt then who knows what you are capable of with a little practice. This is poetry at its finest, story and all. Thanks for sharing.

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you created a story within your poem, which was filled with emotion and great visuals.. there's a bleakness about with has occurred, acceptance of the situation..really well penned

[Kes]

eek, it sounds kind of angry at the end! I love it, mate. It's really good.
But i'm interested to find out what... uh, what happened here. I mean i know in the poem, but i'm interested in the inspiration to it.
Anyways, I love it!
Xx

[Jonathan De Elvira]

the first one?
not bad...
if you really want to write a good poem, I suggest you read from a writer named "Moonflower" in this site....she's awesome in poetry...

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really like this. This is very very good. I like the flow and strength and the wmotion between ur words.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the repitition actually enhances the traumatic and sorrowing aura of the poem~ you relay the victim's confusion and fear through circumstances that immediately change for victims of violence with clarity and undertsanding~