Burden

It's not something you can take back,

not something to erase,

and watch the shavings fill the page

the page that is this sad place

the vivid memories don't seem to fade

with each passing day

my head hits the pillow

and in my dreams it will always stay

this is not what i want

this is nothing to be happy about

you see me here quiet

all my head does is shout

shout your name as you walk by in memory

hoping you will turn and forget it all

i think the real problem here is 

you don't truly care if i fall

there to remind you

staying to keep you

in its clutches so tight 

no matter how hard you try

its going to haunt you in the night

nothing left to hold onto

its taking you into its hell

escaping is nothing but an idea

secretly you gave up trying to repel

Reviews

[Blogger]

Well done! I like the part about dreaming and how the memories stay.

[Saddam]

amazing poem, it has lots of emotion in it, tells
a story, I liked your poem it really makes me feel
emotional :')

[Devesh]

Strong writing, served with one of the most potent emotions there is. Great job, Lauren! :)

[Ruth]

Claustrophobically tangible and melancholic but not without beauty! Lovely x

[Laur]

Thank you so much! That was what I was going for.

[Aguilar]

I liked your poem it really makes me feel emotional :')

[Laur]

thank you!:)

[Justin]

you trying to make me cry?

[Laur]

aww, no! haha

[Devesh]

This is the best review ever! :D

[Justin]

lol thanks

[Tomorrowneverknows]

There is a deep dismay and uneasiness in this poem. True, it's heartbreaking, a heavy emotional burden, day after day, night after night...at a loss for what to do...

Is there no way to escape ?

Maybe as Elizabeth Barrett Browning wrote:

" If you must love me, let it be for nought except for love's sake only ".

A wonderful poem again, Lauren

Jesus

[Laur]

thank you so much!

[Tomorrowneverknows]

You are welcome Lauren ;)

[Meraki]

That sounds like heartbreak. Great job describing it

[Laur]

thank you!

[Chrys]

..in its clutches so tight
no matter how hard you try
its going to haunt you in the night..
It can be a true struggle getting past something as difficult as lost love. I'm glad to see that you use writing as a tool to help cope with certain things that have happened to you in the past. Because I can learn from you as well !

[Laur]

thanks! :)

[Avinash]

I can feel an unfulfilled love leading to a beautiful poem. Despite its tone of melancholy it is still melodious.

[Laur]

thanks! :)