Essence

A bouquet of flowers delivered

With a note of love

The evening comes swiftly

And passionately

Bringing us to one another

I take you into my company

And caress you lovingly

Sending fi re into our soul

I stare into your eyes

I see love, I see passion, and I see kindness

These comfort my soul

And tell me that you love me

Music softly plays songs of love

While we serenade into

In the ambient refl ection

Of the moon poised above us

In the heavens gallery

Whispering word of love into your ears

Your beauty radiates in the moon light

Like a star has arrived on earth and

Taken shape of an angel in my presence

Your sweet essence fi lls the room with

The sweetest aromas raising my passions

It stays with me thru all my days

Like a permeated fixture in my senses

Stroking your hair being greeted by longing

Passionate kisses as our lips lock in passion

Temperatures in our bodies rise as they

become closer

And start feeling the fi res inside

Hotter and closer passionate kisses

And strokes surround us we surrender

Ourselves we become intertwined

Into a lovers knot

Our body temperatures rise and

Engulf each others grinds

Of love, lust, passion and harmony

Those only lovers can share

Manly hands caress your silky angelic skin

Ever so gently with passion

Stroking your shoulders with butterfl y kisses

Droplets of sweat from the heat of our bodies

Sizzles each others skin like fire

My body trembles at your touch

My mind races with visions

Of flower fields and waterfalls

Passion creating a mist as our passion

Race through the heavens

Dancing on the Milky Way

Through heavens gates

 

Lasla

Author's Note

All reviews are welcomed!!!!

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

Very strong piece...poignant in its depth and clarity in terms of desire and love. You've created some great connections in this one...given birth to some wonderful metaphors and striking imagery. I love the last three lines:

Race through the heavens
Dancing on the Milky Way
Through heavens gates

--definitely powerful! I agree that perhaps you used the word "passion", or some derivative, a little too often (I counted six times), and if you changed a few of these instances out I think the piece would have all the more fire and depth. Nicely written, though!

[stephanie]

you have really good imagery and description. very nice!

[Erotic Goddess]

Your beauty radiates in the moon light
Like a star has arrived on earth and
Taken shape of an angel in my presence

Wow, this was sensational. The flow in this piece is flawless, like a waterfall slowly trickling down it's path. You build this to such a crescendo and your word choice is amazing. My only suggestion is to review this, there are some spaces in places where they shouldn't be. But otherwise, flawless.

xxoxx
Stephanie

[Wondering Mind]

Deep passion woven with wonderful imagery and lovely flow.

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

"Like a star has arrived on earth"
The imagery is simply beautiful, I like your style man, excellent write!
I would put the other lines I like in this review but I'd be retyping more than have of the poem! lol

[Lyrical Love]

Lovely write.
Strong feelings depicted with great imagery.
Enjoyable read.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Very passionate and sensual. however, you may have used the word "passion" too many times in the poem. i think some parts of the poem are great, have strong metaphors, but some parts could have been better. just an honest review.

[Amanda]

WOW! what a beautifully written piece, Lasla....it has left me speechless....lol.

seriously, the flow and the imagery is splendid. i could feel the passion coming from the words as they flow through the mind...ahhh...this is giving me ideas!

Amanda