Child Grandfather

Many years ago, when you weren’t born yet, I was a kid just like you. i would spend most of my days running around the farm, trying to get away from it all. many people would say that i needed to go to school and learn. i ran away from those people and listened to my mother and father. they would teach me many things, like the amount of sugar it took to make a pie, and how many men it took to lift a heavy boulder. my aunt did not agree with me on that. one day she came in our land and demanded she saw me and my mother.  she started talking about sending me to a faraway place, called London and attend a school. i asked how long i would stay there, and my mother said for a long time. i then started to think about how much i would miss my family and the farm. my mother also said that i would be sleeping and eating there. i wondered how the beds and the food was going to be. i then asked my aunt why i was going there, for i thought it was because i was bad or maybe it could be a reward. she then told me that it was a school. i didn’t want to go  to the school. i wanted to stay home and work on the farm. of course, all 9-year-olds didn’t want to leave home and go to a boarding school. i wanted to go, to meet new boys and girls and play with them, but i also wanted to stay to see the birthdays they will miss, the puppy they might buy me for christmas, and to see my baby brother being born. the only way i would be able to find my way home is by having a horse, and the only horse i have ridden is the big old mare, named Hal. she would be my only escape, but where would i go, would i know how to get home? i have never been to London before. when my aunt left, i made a plan to hide in my fort. right before my eyes drooped and fell asleep, i promised myself never to go to that school. the next morning, when i woke up, i got myself a bucket of water, a couple sandwiches, and ran to my fort about 2 miles down the road. when i got there, i saw a lump in a box. i heard a lump in a box, but i smelled a dog. i opened the box. i looked in the box. it was then i realized that there was a dog in the box! i pulled him out and sat him down. he couldn’t be older than a puppy. he looked like a german shepherd and a blue heeler mix. of course i thought i was the luckiest kid in the world. i started to think of what his name would be. then i thought if it was a boy. i then scooped it up in my arms and ran home to my mother and father. when i made it back to my home, my aunt had left. i felt a warm bubbly feeling of victory in my chest. when i found my father in his favorite chair, i walked over to him and said “father, is this puppy a boy or a girl?” he asked me to hand him the puppy, and he lifted it up gently. he then replied “its a girl.” i then had the perfect name for her. her new name was Asp. i then ran out of the room and to the barn, still with the small puppy in my arms. i found a satchel in the barn next to Hal, and put Asp in it. i looped it around my body, and saddled up Hal. i galloped all the way to town with Asp and my money. i went to the General store and went up to the counter to ask if they sold collars. i asked “hey mister, do you sell dog collars here?” then slowly the man at the counter looked down at me as if i was from another planet. i asked again, and this time he answered. he said “i'll go get some from the back.” then, he submerged into a door behind the counter. about two or so minutes later, he emerged again and said “i found these three collars.” one was black leather with spikes on it, one was just plainly leather, and one was red cloth. i chose the one with spikes and payed him gladly. i then walked out of the store, and mounted Hal again. the ride home was kinda boring, but i was fine with that. when i opened the door, i found my aunt  and parents conversing. i wanted to as silently as i could, go back the way i came, but i was found out by my aunt. she came up to me, and when she saw Asp, she stepped back, and i walked over to my mother and father. i asked my mother to put on Asp’s collar. she put it on Asp and said to me “please go out and play, your father and i need to talk with your aunt. i went out with Asp and played. when i started, it the sun was in the middle of the sky. when i was allowed to come back in, it was almost dark. during that time, i was able to train Asp a couple commands. i taught her how to sit, stay and speak. She is a very good dog, by what I know. i asked my mother what she and father were talking about. she said that they were talking about the school with his aunt. I didn't like that idea at all. I ran outside, not forgetting to bring asp with me. By the time Asp was going to be about ten months old, I was about to be shipped off to school without asp. I wouldn’t be able bring myself to leave Asp. That is when I packed up, took all my money with me, and ran with Asp to the barn. We didn’t stop running until we made it to the barn with the stable. I saddled up Hal, and rode off down the road. when the sun’s last rays glimmered in the horizon, we were running away towards town at top speed.

To be Continued...

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a sweet & interesting story, full of realistic details shown from a child's point of view. I was eagerly reading, as every part of the story made me want to know: "what next?" It's easy to understand why this kid doesn't want to go to school, as you've shown the love of the simple rural life with much imagery. It would be good to learn to use some paragraph breaks, becuz a big solid block of text can be intimidating to some readers.