Half of Me

My passion sits beneath a stone

A place where I can't go

For death has come to half of me

With one half dying slow

How cruel is death to take my heart?

But yet it lets me breathe

It came between the two of us

And it will not let me leave

Half of me has forsaken life

It lays out in a field

The other half will not let go

It simply will not yield

I pray for death to come my way

Each day on her behalf

But death can't see how much I miss

My beloved second half?

My passion sits beneath a stone

Where one day I will be

I can't be whole until I'm back

With the other half of me

Reviews

[b.platte]

Oh wow. I started reading this and didn't realize what it was saying until the third stanza. So, I went back to re-read it and my mouth just dropped. This is so beautiful. I mean I've never had an overwhelming feeling of tragdedy like I have reading this. I don't knwo how you did it. This deserves to win all the awards.

[Whiskurz]

Thank you......Whisk

[dawn aulis]

Powerful, I think we all have times when we feel this way, yet words are hard to find. You described the feeling perfectly.

[Whiskurz]

Thanks again Dawn....Whisk

[WingsToFly]

beautiful

[Whiskurz]

Thank you......Whisk

[Sheila Kline]

Congratulations on your win with this write of painful loss of love! Wow, it is a very, very good poem of being ripped apart with such a loss. It certainly deserves the win, and is going in my favorite folder!!

[Mary]

In love, two become one and that one is the whole. This beautifully written poem begs the question of what happens when that whole is torn apart through death, leaving a part in life and a part beneath stone. Raw grief perfectly penned.

[Mary]

The first line

[IAmGhost120]

I love what you've done with this poem. It's meaningful, but you don't directly say that the other person is deceased. I love your use of words, and I think the line "My passion sits beneath a stone" is extremely resonating. Excellent work.

[Mishca Wombat]

Lovely. It became better when I read it the second time. This line is so beautiful.
"Half of me has forsaken life
It lays out in a field"

[darkness*star1985]

This is sad but very beautiful written.. GOOD WORK..