The Liar and the Thief

I lied when I said I didn't care

Before you walked away

And when I told you, "Don't come back"

I wanted you to stay

When I said I didn't love you

The pain was on your face

I said it wasn't meant to be

I said I needed space

I told you I didn't need you

You hung your head and cried

I want you to know it wasn't true

I'm sorry that I lied

You stole my heart the day we met

And you never gave it back

And all the good you have inside

Is all the good I lack

You've taken all I had to give

You left my heart a void

Between us both we can't turn back

Our love has been destroyed

You're better than me, you always were

And though this love was brief

I'll never forget the love we had

The liar and the thief

Reviews

[December Blaize]

First off, congratulations on winning 1st place in my contest! I really enjoyed reading this... they rhyming is wonderful, and it flows really well. It resonated within me, because I've felt the pain in your words. It is a disastrously beautiful poem, and I love the title/last line... "the liar and the thief"... it's got a great ring to it, speaks volumes.

[disheveledApathy]

This was so good it gave me chills.
Fantastical write. ;D
-Mer

[Whiskurz]

Thank you my friend.....Whisk

[Miranda Richard]

The rhyme isn't forced, and quite good. Your writing is exceptional!

[Elvis Gilley]

Powerful self expression that could only come from deep emotional wounds. Imagery was great. I enjoyed it good job.

[EileenMarie]

Wow......... magnificent! It is beautifully written.

Men do feel after all :)
thanks for this what a great write!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Another heartfelt, and beautifully written and flowing poem of yours. Your voice is honest, and gentle and these words had great meaning to me. So many great lines, but I especially love:
"And all the good you have inside
Is all the good I lack"
"I'll never forget the love we had
The liar and the thief"

Well, done as I have come to know from you.

[Patricia B. Hepler]

'...I'll never forget the love we had
The liar and the thief'

Great form, rhythm, and topic..The last 2 sentences are exceptional. Excellent. ~pat

[Drifter]

This poem gets better with each stanza. It put me in awe. Excellent job

[Pax]

wow, great story.

[Owlgirl]

The last stanza is my favorite, and the whole thing is gripping and amazing. Great job! I love this poem of yours, it's probobly my favorite. Very well written, amazing rhyme scheme!