You entered this in my "Deep" contest and after I read it, I just felt the need to review it, so I searched it (went through quite a few pages) and finally found it.
I was reading along, kind of bored at first like, yeah, yeah, her mom died, big whoop, I've read a lot of poems like that and then... BAM. "What does abortion mean?" My heart literally stopped, I'm not kidding. I kind of froze for a minute. This poem has all the means to be average, all the means to just be boring, and then you get to the last stanza and you practically want to give you a standing ovation.
I'm not against abortion, I'm not for it either, I think it's a choice, and it's sad, but the baby's life could have ended up being worse than death with a 15 year old mom who's parents have shunned her or something. Sometimes I think it's the better choice.
But this. I've read maybe two other poems from the baby's point of view about abortion, and none really stuck with me, I can't remember them, but this I think will ring in my ears a lot. This is so amazing, I'm just babbling here, KEEP WRITING! You're good.
I'm also going to friend you, if that's okay.
Posted 12 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
hi
idk if i got confuzd but i created the "Deep" conttest
i searched up "deep" and only .. read morehi
idk if i got confuzd but i created the "Deep" conttest
i searched up "deep" and only my contest came up, no one elses.
idk if im wrong but im not afraid to check. please DONT take credit for stuff ive dun
not cool
12 Years Ago
Dude, my contest was over 2 months ago, if you search 'Deep' and then change the setting to complete.. read moreDude, my contest was over 2 months ago, if you search 'Deep' and then change the setting to completed contests, go to the second page, I am the sixth one down.
I would never take credit for someone else's work. Some guy did that to me about a week ago, but he changed it to something awful and pornographic and it made me cry, it feels awful to have something of yours stolen, I'd never do that.
And next time change the status to 'Completed', because its set on Active.
Omigosh im so sorry glad i cleared that up tho
Its happened to me and i swore i wud never let .. read moreOmigosh im so sorry glad i cleared that up tho
Its happened to me and i swore i wud never let it happen again
Thx for answring me so quickly
and sorry again
12 Years Ago
I can't believe I never replied! I thought I had... weird. No harm done :) It's all good :)
You entered this in my "Deep" contest and after I read it, I just felt the need to review it, so I searched it (went through quite a few pages) and finally found it.
I was reading along, kind of bored at first like, yeah, yeah, her mom died, big whoop, I've read a lot of poems like that and then... BAM. "What does abortion mean?" My heart literally stopped, I'm not kidding. I kind of froze for a minute. This poem has all the means to be average, all the means to just be boring, and then you get to the last stanza and you practically want to give you a standing ovation.
I'm not against abortion, I'm not for it either, I think it's a choice, and it's sad, but the baby's life could have ended up being worse than death with a 15 year old mom who's parents have shunned her or something. Sometimes I think it's the better choice.
But this. I've read maybe two other poems from the baby's point of view about abortion, and none really stuck with me, I can't remember them, but this I think will ring in my ears a lot. This is so amazing, I'm just babbling here, KEEP WRITING! You're good.
I'm also going to friend you, if that's okay.
Posted 12 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
hi
idk if i got confuzd but i created the "Deep" conttest
i searched up "deep" and only .. read morehi
idk if i got confuzd but i created the "Deep" conttest
i searched up "deep" and only my contest came up, no one elses.
idk if im wrong but im not afraid to check. please DONT take credit for stuff ive dun
not cool
12 Years Ago
Dude, my contest was over 2 months ago, if you search 'Deep' and then change the setting to complete.. read moreDude, my contest was over 2 months ago, if you search 'Deep' and then change the setting to completed contests, go to the second page, I am the sixth one down.
I would never take credit for someone else's work. Some guy did that to me about a week ago, but he changed it to something awful and pornographic and it made me cry, it feels awful to have something of yours stolen, I'd never do that.
And next time change the status to 'Completed', because its set on Active.
Omigosh im so sorry glad i cleared that up tho
Its happened to me and i swore i wud never let .. read moreOmigosh im so sorry glad i cleared that up tho
Its happened to me and i swore i wud never let it happen again
Thx for answring me so quickly
and sorry again
12 Years Ago
I can't believe I never replied! I thought I had... weird. No harm done :) It's all good :)
12 Years Ago
hahaha im glad (whew)
Wow. Just wow. I cannot believe what I just read. I was not expecting that ending. All I have to say is that this was an amazing topic and a great way to present it. You really shocked me witht his poem. I like how you have a variety of different styles. Great job. I loved it. This made it past the first cut in the contest.