Gray Eyes~

Its bout a Boy its not really spose to ryme

Your Rare smile makes my day light up,

i find myself traped in your arms,

warm, light falls on your face,

i know ive found my place.

and its with you~

 

 

 

Reviews

[Caitlynxoxo]

A few grammatical errors ("traped" is "Trapped" and "ive" is "I've") but besides those very minor things, i absolutely loved this! You have such a talent for writing short-but-swet poems, ones that are enough to satisfy a reader, even if they are short. I especially loved how you described this person's smile; "rare". :D LOVED THAT! Thanks for sharing, and keep up the awesome work!

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[nono]

Okay very pretty such a cute little story. Okay but like traped is trapped and there are many types of rhyming I mean like a lot if you want to know some just message me. Otherwise this poem is very well put together! I wrote a poem that kinda rhymes if you wanna look at it's called "I miss you" But I mean I'm not a good rhymer, but being a poet doesn't mean you have to rhyme. Nicely done it's a cute lil poem...I think someone's love struck lol n_n

[~Death The Kid~ ☜..]

thanks! ^^ i worked on it for on hour thinking of it!

[Pirateking37]

I like it, it's sweet ^^

[Daydreamer54]

nice short poem! it's very sweet! :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

it's short and sweet but I want to read more.
Nice work

[~Death The Kid~ ☜..]

tell me wat u think! (my pic has notin to do with the poem but oh well!)