Pinocchio

A metaphorical composition with a powerful message of the choice to mature independently, growing up and heading to face the real world

 

He’s a young boy who resists authority

A young boy who detests seniority

But that’s only because he’s sick of being controlled

Pulled by a puppeteer as a modern day Pinocchio

 

So now he wants to be a real boy

Now he wants to make his own choice without being told that it’s wrong

 

But independence doesn’t come without a price

It’s not cheap

And it won’t be easy

There’s no smooth sailing on waters chopped by twelve foot swells

As you’re swallowed up by Monstro the big mouthed whale

Because there’s unseen strife that will take you by surprise

It’s hard to grow up and take control of your own life

It’s not a paved road

But you’ll still have to pay the toll

You’ll have to keep your eyes peeled for the troll underneath the bridge

The thief that wants to steal everything you have from underneath your ribs

But your heart

Is yours

And no matter how cold or hard you think it gets

You must never change the integrity of what’s born deep within

 

So feel free

Cut your strings and stand alone

Show Geppetto you can do it on your own

Muster up the strength to take your first step

Because you’re no longer a wood frame; you’ve turned to flesh

And it wasn’t because you made a wish

Instead it was because you had a dream

And you believed it could be accomplished without having to be dependent

You stayed persistent and you fought resistance

But it was done with honor from respect for others

You didn’t tell lies and your nose didn’t grow

There was no malicious manipulation

You were driven by 100% pure determination

If you stick to your core and abandon bad intent

If you stick to your principles, temptation can never make a dent

It will be easier to avoid the misbehaved and keep away from Pleasure Island

Then your mind can stay clean from the worldly poisons

You’ll save yourself turmoil from poor decisions

But that doesn’t mean they won’t be made

And you'll still have to suffer from their repercussions

End of discussion--its going to happen!

Life is 10% of what happens to you, 90% is based upon your reaction

So secure your traction and be prepared

Or else you might as well turn soft as a teddy bear

Because a life lived scared is wasting precious time

 

And if that’s the way you’re going to live it,

Then you might as well keep independence on your shelf of dreams

Keep the credits rolling and watch the screen

And Tell Geppetto

He can re-attach his strings

 

Reviews

[J.Black]

"And if that's the way you're going to live it,
Then you might as well keep independence on your shelf of dreams
Keep the credits rolling and watch the screen
And Tell Geppetto
He can re-attach his strings"

Lalli, this was just a master piece carved out of your words. Life lessons, you sure in hell nailed them to me.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Lalli,

This is another of your characteristically strong poems. It is full of life's wisdom and a wonderful expounding of sound advice. Let's hope we all learn from your wonderful insights.

Very kindest regards,

Rick

[Dani California]

"Because a life lived scared is wasting precious time
And if that's the way you're going to live it,
Then you might as well keep independence on your shelf of dreams
Keep the credits rolling and watch screen
And Tell GeppettoHe can re-attach his strings"

haha! Well said my dear! This is just great Lalli... once again. Consistently giving your readers a push in the right direction... love it. Very well writtien .. and an outstanding msg!

A true pleasure as always :)

[Amanda]

the lessons in life that you have instilled in this write are so very true. determination, independence, integrity, honor and respect are all qualities that make a person who they are...to live your life with fear is not living at all and you are right, might as well go hide in the closet.

a really good write you have here, Lalli :) you're writing is always so full of meaning and you give us pause to stop and think about it.

Always,

Amanda

[Legion]

This was splendidly done. A great message about life that everyone should take heed of. Love it. I like the use of the Pinnochio story to explore and explain the lesson as well. Kudos.

[ANNA]

I did found that you haven't wrote something like this in awhile. Your getting more and more powerful and open minded about how you word your structure, style and flow but you've always been inscribable in doing that! I know when you write others look up to you and you have talent in writing that you never knew you had I bet!? ;)

So, I loved how you formed you poem here. The title is awesome. Makes you wonder what someones going to say. Although, you alway tend to surprise us! You do have a couple of things need fixing but no bug.
You describe this so well, such a messge Jason. I like the part where you said.

But independence doesn't come without a price
It's not cheap
And it won't be easy
There's no smooth sailing when the waters chopped up by twelve foot swells
As you're swallowed by Monstro the big mouthed whale
Because there's unseen strife that will take ya by surprise
It's hard to grow up and take control of your own life
It's not a paved road
But you'll still have pay the toll
You'll have to keep your eyes peeled for the troll underneath the bridge
The thief that wants to steal everything you have from underneath your ribs
But your heartIs yours
And no matter how cold or hard you think it gets
You must never change the integrity of what's born deep within

Brilliant in describing what you feel and the emotion in this was over the top breath taking. I can now understand. You can learn a lot from a poem. The style, grace, rhythm, ect.

Jason, this was beyond moving. I'm soooo very proud of you, for never giving up your writings.
Can't wait to read more of your inscribable poems..

Much love n respect,
Anna

[just is]

So feel freeCut your strings and stand alone
Show Geppetto you can do it on your own
Muster up the strength to take your first step
Because you're no longer a wood frame; you've turned to flesh
And it wasn't because you made a wish
Instead it was because you had a dream
And you believed it could be accomplished without having to be dependent
You stayed persistent and you fought resistance
But it was done with honor from respect for others
You didn't tell lies and your nose didn't grow

Love these lines here, So true too, this is wonderful, I like this write alot and will be adding it to my libarary