Pinocchio

A metaphorical composition with a powerful message of the choice to mature independently, growing up and heading to face the real world

 

He’s a young boy who resists authority

A young boy who detests seniority

But that’s only because he’s sick of being controlled

Pulled by a puppeteer as a modern day Pinocchio

 

So now he wants to be a real boy

Now he wants to make his own choice without being told that it’s wrong

 

But independence doesn’t come without a price

It’s not cheap

And it won’t be easy

There’s no smooth sailing on waters chopped by twelve foot swells

As you’re swallowed up by Monstro the big mouthed whale

Because there’s unseen strife that will take you by surprise

It’s hard to grow up and take control of your own life

It’s not a paved road

But you’ll still have to pay the toll

You’ll have to keep your eyes peeled for the troll underneath the bridge

The thief that wants to steal everything you have from underneath your ribs

But your heart

Is yours

And no matter how cold or hard you think it gets

You must never change the integrity of what’s born deep within

 

So feel free

Cut your strings and stand alone

Show Geppetto you can do it on your own

Muster up the strength to take your first step

Because you’re no longer a wood frame; you’ve turned to flesh

And it wasn’t because you made a wish

Instead it was because you had a dream

And you believed it could be accomplished without having to be dependent

You stayed persistent and you fought resistance

But it was done with honor from respect for others

You didn’t tell lies and your nose didn’t grow

There was no malicious manipulation

You were driven by 100% pure determination

If you stick to your core and abandon bad intent

If you stick to your principles, temptation can never make a dent

It will be easier to avoid the misbehaved and keep away from Pleasure Island

Then your mind can stay clean from the worldly poisons

You’ll save yourself turmoil from poor decisions

But that doesn’t mean they won’t be made

And you'll still have to suffer from their repercussions

End of discussion--its going to happen!

Life is 10% of what happens to you, 90% is based upon your reaction

So secure your traction and be prepared

Or else you might as well turn soft as a teddy bear

Because a life lived scared is wasting precious time

 

And if that’s the way you’re going to live it,

Then you might as well keep independence on your shelf of dreams

Keep the credits rolling and watch the screen

And Tell Geppetto

He can re-attach his strings

 

Reviews

[J.Black]

"And if that's the way you're going to live it,
Then you might as well keep independence on your shelf of dreams
Keep the credits rolling and watch the screen
And Tell Geppetto
He can re-attach his strings"

Lalli, this was just a master piece carved out of your words. Life lessons, you sure in hell nailed them to me.

[Shelly Araujo]

beautifully written! "life lived scared", I wish I had learned this earlier in life; we wrong our kids by not allowing them to fail as often as they need to succeed.

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

Aiight Lalli....I'm a fan. Very clever wordplay and you're like a poetic MC after my own heart. I hear a voice as I'm reading this piece(my first of yours). And that's difficult to do most of the time, but your flow and words are easily heard through my reading. I can quote some of your lines, but it wouldn't be anything that hasn't been done apparently by your reviewers. Good s**t, great title and content. I'll continue checking for your stuff!

[Periac]

i enjoyed the reference to pinocchio and the comparison to modern day trials.....a very thought provoked write...great work!

[Roxie Martelli]

So many things that I can take and feel from this poem. I absolutely love how this piece goes together and how much passion can come from the words that are simply WRITTEN, I can only imagine how it sounds said out loud.
Passion, endurance, solidarity, encouragement, there are so many things I take and feel from this poem. Simply put, I appreciate it and really thank you for writing it. It hit well in a good place for me. Something I needed to hear. Inspirational.

Best of Days
-Roxie

[~Mary Ann~]

Qualities that are necessary while traveling the unpaved roads in life.. or meeting those trolls under the bridges. I love the message of making the choice of living life as a living boy versus a wooden one. We can all make the choice to live life to the fullest with determination, independence, honor, and respect or we can let life pass us by and live it like a wooden puppet just going through the motions others dictate.

Above all the choice is ours. A wonderful piece... well inked. :)

[Seriana]

"But your heart
Is yours
And no matter how cold or hard you think it gets
You must never change the integrity of what's born deep within"

Those lines right there completed the entire piece for me. This is a superbly written composition. I LOVE all of the dark, threatening references you make with regards to the road. No doubt the road is never paved in gold.

Wonderfully penned. It's nice to read something so deep, something to make you think. :)

[Bennett Logan]

Really good stuff, man. You wrap this one up very nicely, and I like the "it's always your choice" moral. As I've said in previous reviews, this has a real spoken word quality about it.

If I had to suggest anything, however, it would be to use more imagery. You could totally run wild with the whole puppet thing -- wood clacking, strings stretching, hinges squeaking... But it's just an idea.

Keep up the good work, Lalli, and I'll catch you later.

[M. Amphet Salt]

Beautiful Moral. I love how you took the story and reinterpret it into a more modern theme(s). It is full of emotion; however there was something here that kept me from feeling the emotion. None-the-less their is a lesson here.

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wow. this was a wonderful poem...

These are all real lessons of life and you wrote about them very nicely

well done!