Communication

People refuse to communiate and talk to each other... we're so close up

 

Communication

 

 

Cooo-muuuunnnica-shon!

 

I’m calling for communication

Verbal interaction out our mouths as a use of expression with one another

Even a stranger

No…I didn’t st-st-st-st-studder

I said a stranger

And yes I’m aware of stranger danger, but what harm can come from a little conversation

Breaking the barriers

That are interfering with skills obtained from social interaction

We’ve become socially inept

Lacking the depth to converse with our neighbors

Keeping us confined comfortably

To close quarters

 

People just want to keep to themselves

Until they’re in trouble

And they need help

We won’t talk anyone other than the people we know

Posing a question

 

Unless they are introduced from the inside how do these people become a part of our lives?

 

If we continue to live in this recluse seclusion

Guarding from the intrusion of society

Distancing ourselves

For personal solitude

Which wouldn’t be such a bad idea

Considering how corrupt it’s become

But it’s being done to the extreme and not in moderation

 

It seems to be that we only break free when it's necessary

When some outside pressure

Whether it’s in the classroom or a work setting is forcing us to speak to one another

But unfortunately

By this time

It’s been so long since talking face to face with a stranger

That we developed a nervous speech impediment

No different than a st-st-st-st-studder from the butterflies

As the hands clam up

The tongue gets tied

And neurons fire so quickly our synapses fry

 

This wouldn’t happen though…

If we’d be more open and communicate with the common folk

Because you’d be surprised

What we can learn from their lives

So open your mouth, it’ll open your eyes

Reviews

[Carole]

I couldn't agree with you more. Our greatest growth in communication can come from drawing others out and encouraging them to talk. Everyone, and I mean EVERYONE enjoys talking about themselves. As a whole, I don't know too many strangers and will talk to just about anyone. I am also a pretty good judge of people though and if I sense insincerity and an impure motive, I will back away.

As a whole, I believe our society does not know good communication skills, and sadly the younger generation struggles even more with the technology...ie. cell phones and text messaging, etc...Too many distractions and reasons not to communicate.

Anyway, you have touched on something that most can relate to. Great job. Lali!

[Amanda]

this is quite true, my dear Lalli....how are we to learn and get to know others if we don't open our mouths and speak to others....i try to on occasion....what is the harm in talking to people?

a good write, Lalli...thanks for sharing this with me.

Always,

Amanda

ps....i'm sorry i hadn't gotten to this sooner...i'm up to my eyeballs as well...lol A.

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AWESOME.........we in many ways think alike! I like your work. I like your commitment and your enthusiasm and your HONESTY!

[MrJodie]

This one is excellent, Lalli. The quality is fantastic. YOU'VE REALLY GROWN, MAN! I'm thoroughly impressed. The whole piece just pounds and sounds like drum in my head, screaming to be read aloud.

FIRE IT OFF, MY BRUTHA! Your voice is like music.

Love and light, dear ones.

[M@]

Snaps fingers.

A great, and fun, read. I love the off and slant rhymes you use throughout, and I also like the small rhymes you use within the same lines at some points. It makes the poem flow great, and makes it not only incredibly interesting to read and say, but easy as well. This is a poem that literally, flows off the tongue, ironic considering it's subject matter.

Your poetry always seems a bit paradoxical to the traditionalist. There's a point to be driven into the minds of the readers here, but it's rather hard to pinpoint it and anchor it to a single analysis; rather, the poem must be taken in holistically in order to be understood. You deviate from the path set by more traditional, even some more modern poetry, in that the whole poem, along with the action of spoken word, is the point. You pull this off and the reader/listener understands that, because they know that you know the rules of poetry first, and that you're breaking them second.

If anything, the st-st-st-studder throws me off when I read it and if I were to listen to it, but then again, it's a more styalistic choice on your part rather than an interuption of the flow of the rest of the poem. I take it you've read this piece in front of an audience, so I'd just play with it and see how it sounds (though most likely, the reason it's there in the first place is because you like how it sounds).

A great read and message. A bit more irony though, as everyone telling you this is doing so from the comforts of their homes/workplaces/internet cafe's/etc.

[ANNA]

Well done sweets!! It came out wonderfuly good. How you touched on the subject of the word communication and how we as people don't do any talking! Just text and e-mail each other and we will get what we are trying to say to that preson!! (NOT) WOW we don't even know how to written a letter any more. We just end up sending Christmas cards as a e-mail or B-day cards. Which is nice and everything. But I would rather hear someone say the words. I love how you can take this subject and turn it around! By touching people..Making them see that there is more to life then figer pressing phones! lol...Yes and I think that this part tied into gether very well:

"If we continue to live in this recluse seclusionGuarding from the intrusion of societyDistancing ourselvesFor personal solitudeWhich wouldn't be such a bad ideaConsidering how corrupt it's becomeBut it's being done to the extreme and not in moderation"

By far my fav part was when you said:
By this time, It's been so long since talking face to face with a stranger
That we developed a nervous speech impediment, No different than a st-st-st-st-studder
As the hands clam up, The tongue gets tied, And neurons fire so quickly our synapses fry,
This wouldn't happen though�If we'd be more open and communicate with the common folk
Because you'd be surprised, What we can learn from their lives,
So open your mouth, it'll open your eyes"

Love IT!!!! Yes, people open your eyes and mouth, n stop hiding your Communication skills

Much lov n respect Jason,
Anna

[Damian Alan Gray]

Welcome to the post-9/11 world, brought to you by Government/Media-instated fear, Microsoft Technologies and the Internet(s).
Incredible write, Lalli! Thanks for sharing. The only thing I would work on with this piece is cleaning up some portions of the grammatical usage. Little things, like:
"It seems to be that we only break free when it (is) necessary"
No big deal and easily overlooked. Overall, and throughout, a great write!