Ripples and Reflections

Sometimes we get a pure glimpse of ourselves, which may not last too long.

Walking alone

Lost in thought

Near the water

Stops.

Turn around

See your soul

Look inside

Stop.

 

You are

Lost in thought

In the reflection.

An image is shown

Back from nature

A flower falls

Ripples form...

The reflection is gone.

Author's Note

Little thing, may edit later and make it something bigger, but right now i like it the way it is.
Oh yes, reflection is in both meanings, the reflection of one�s image over the water and the reflection as in thoughts.

Reviews

[Starsong]

Please leave it just the way it is! It is pure, uncluttered, simple. And in that way it is profoundly amazing and perfect. Keep up the good work!

[Steve H]

I agree, like it the way it is, short and sweet :D
And i got the dual meaning of reflection, clever stuff!!! keep writing x

[Markymark]

I knew it had two layers. Yes, I agree this can be further developed into something deeper, but it stands well as a short piece too. When many people see who they really are, they usually don't like what they see, for at times it's in turmoil that they see their true colors.

Love it.

Markymark

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

Wow! This is good! Very good indeed! Has this feel of autumn. I can see the person walking in long coat at the coast.
If you expand it a little (don't over do it!) then you are building on a solid base. Maybe add a bit about the reflection of the person if you feel like it.

Technical:
Would divide the first stanza into two each by four lines, the: "Stops." is very strong there

[mae-mae<3]

Wow. I really like this. I says so much in a few lines. Very nicely written mate. Lovely. Simply lovely.

[Aimee Mahathy]

I like where this is going, and I'd love to see where you take it!
The image of the brief glimpse, the flower falling, and the ripples making it disappear as quickly as it came - beautiful!