Tears
A Poem by
Dark and Mysterious
Salty water slips down when no bruise outside 'cause the real bruise lies deep inside...
Pain inflicted
Beaten down
Tattered and broken
Never made a sound
Abused, cheated
Bruised and tortured
But still strong
Never showed any feeling
Braved it all
But a few harsh words
Scarred her heart
A tear escaped
She felt pain
It was her secret
For only her to know
'Cause the world didn't know
That she had a heart...
© 2014 Dark and Mysterious
Author's Note
I originally wrote this as a one liner (description) but then I added the lines... Tell me what you think.
Featured Review
Short yet poignant.
I believe this poem could describe a vast majority of people. There are many forms of abuse, too many victims to count in this world. Every day sees that list grow larger and larger.
We all have hearts. Sometimes though we are forced to cut them out and put them somewhere free of pain. Unfortunately, if we leave them there too long, it ends with us being the ones to inflict familiar pains on the new batch of victims.
Quite thought provoking.
-Caradoc
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Very nicely written. I thought it was amazing and very descriptive/emotional.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Very nicely written. I thought it was amazing and very descriptive/emotional.
Hmmmm.....this speaks to me on a very deep level. I have found from my own experience and from my experiences dealing with those I have loved, that those who seem to have no feelings at all, are actually the ones with the softest hearts. Walls are built to protect what is too fragile to keep out in the open. This was very well done. It is raw and real and speaks volumes to me. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Hmmmm.....this speaks to me on a very deep level. I have found from my own experience and from my experiences dealing with those I have loved, that those who seem to have no feelings at all, are actually the ones with the softest hearts. Walls are built to protect what is too fragile to keep out in the open. This was very well done. It is raw and real and speaks volumes to me. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
12 Years Ago
thank you for reviewing
i like it alot. can relate a little. this was really good and flowed nicely. i like the idea. great job
Posted 12 Years Ago
i like it alot. can relate a little. this was really good and flowed nicely. i like the idea. great job
Full of truth and pain. Thank you for sharingyour art :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
Full of truth and pain. Thank you for sharingyour art :)
12 Years Ago
thanks for reviewing :)
Powerful, beautiful words. So easy to relate to and so true. I do have a suggestion though, on the line "tattered and broke", maybe change "broke" to "broken"? I don't know, it just sounds better to me...hehe...:D great poem!
Posted 12 Years Ago
Powerful, beautiful words. So easy to relate to and so true. I do have a suggestion though, on the line "tattered and broke", maybe change "broke" to "broken"? I don't know, it just sounds better to me...hehe...:D great poem!
12 Years Ago
Ty for the suggestion :)
Good job! You used powerful words and descriptions that leave an impression on the reader's mind. Brilliant :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
Good job! You used powerful words and descriptions that leave an impression on the reader's mind. Brilliant :)
12 Years Ago
Thank you :)
This is so amazing. And I can relate to it so much, almost like you knew. Those last two lines are especialy powerfull. Good job.
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is so amazing. And I can relate to it so much, almost like you knew. Those last two lines are especialy powerfull. Good job.
Wow. True, pure, full of pain. Excellent write.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Wow. True, pure, full of pain. Excellent write.
12 Years Ago
Not a problem :)
I think this is great! In terms of abusive potential, Words are truly more dangerous than anything physical in this world
Posted 12 Years Ago
I think this is great! In terms of abusive potential, Words are truly more dangerous than anything physical in this world
I love it! :D
Posted 12 Years Ago
I love it! :D
12 Years Ago
You're welcome :)
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