I crave change.I long to spread my wings and leave this place that I both love and loathe.I’m learning to accept my past, the mistakes I’ve shunned from my mind, and move past them, onto something new.I want to pack up my things, leave this life behind me.Bring my stacks of books and pour myself into them; allow them to envelope me in their greatness, embracing me.Find a new place to begin a new life; start over.Now that I’m on my own, I need to rediscover myself, see who I am without someone to cling to.Of course there will be moments of longing; I love to linger in the arms of someone familiar.I love the sweet touches another can give me.But can I not support myself?Can I not feel the warmth of my own touch?These arms can enfold me, a stranger is not needed.The intense feelings will return with another someday.But until then, I must embrace this new opportunity, this new strength I’ve stumbled upon.Seize the day.
I like the prose format, and the thoughts therein, but I think this piece needs a bit more imagery. Even Rimbaud used to lace his prose-poems with imagery, or aphorisms like "this is the time for assassins!" and I think either will enrich this poem. I'm also unsure that the last sentence is needed...I know not everyone knows Latin, but I think Carpe Diem most ppl know, right? like in Vino Veritas... I think most readers, which is your audience, would know that, but I may be wrong on this. The title caught my eye as I too have recently written one on the subject "the die in diem" - if find it interesting that "die" is latin for day, don't know, somewhat ironic. Anyhow, I'm rambling again. I enjoyed the read.
I like the prose format, and the thoughts therein, but I think this piece needs a bit more imagery. Even Rimbaud used to lace his prose-poems with imagery, or aphorisms like "this is the time for assassins!" and I think either will enrich this poem. I'm also unsure that the last sentence is needed...I know not everyone knows Latin, but I think Carpe Diem most ppl know, right? like in Vino Veritas... I think most readers, which is your audience, would know that, but I may be wrong on this. The title caught my eye as I too have recently written one on the subject "the die in diem" - if find it interesting that "die" is latin for day, don't know, somewhat ironic. Anyhow, I'm rambling again. I enjoyed the read.