Orders Up

You make me wanna cry

Pull back four years

And exchaneg them for a different ride.

A new scene with just you and me

Tell me baby wasnt that how it was supposed to be?

You got off at the wronge exit

And i was left here standing

Hoping you'd come around that corner

And love me some more.

Don't you still love me baby?

Don't i creep across your mind

Like a dirty thought

That makes you smile.

Don't I make you want to stop and chat just for a while.

Oh gee it feels so good to see you smile.

Like a diary without a lock no need for a key

You could always read me baby.

My body language.

Its talking crazy.

But you don't stay long yoru orders up

Numbers been called.

Not ready for forever because you left a long time ago.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

The emotion and imagery is done very well. This is one of those poems where you know they are leaving, but they haven't had the guts to fess up yet. The only thing I find distracting is the use of the word baby, but the rest of this poem is done really well. I like the use or the phrase Order UP.

[PROPAGANDIST]

its funny how we always hope for things even when the world keeps on telling us we should let go
this peice says alot and the imagery says a ton more
love it


^PROPAGANDIST^

[LadyCardiac]

wow you definitely hit this head on. But im learnning only hope floats ...

[Rene Velez]

this a good piece of writing, of love, yearning, and hope...really nice poem

[LadyCardiac]

Thanks and yeah the word baby actually plays into a more deeper part of me. I have trust issues and its only one person whose ever entered my life and left that i ever cared enough to care about. i call HIM baby.:)