“Sorrow in Love”, Its Who You Are, LadyAnn

When the man of my life left me.....how I felt...how to move on!

“Sorrow in Love”, Its Who You Are, LadyAnn

 

You were lost,

You think you’re found,

It was high cost,

It was a romantic sound,

A nightbird called you,

Like you were his,

But through it through,

Your love was missed!

 

It’s not the way he left,

It’s just his game,

How long your hair really is,

It’s not how you spell your name,

 

It’s Who You Are, LadyAnn!

 

You’re not alone,

Your heart is with friends,

You’re not a stone,

Your heart can mend,

You will find a special place,

For which your smile,

Will move from face to face,

To make it all worthwhile,

 

It’s not the way he left,

It’s just his game,

How long your hair really is,

It’s not how you spell your name,

 

It’s Who You Are, LadyAnn!

 

 

Your beauty lies deep inside,

Your heart sings and always gives,

When he left the heart almost died,

But again it loves and now it lives,

You write your story down,

But not for fame,

It’s not for glory bounds,

But feels the same,

 

It’s not the way he left,

It’s just his game,

How long your hair really is,

It’s not how you spell your name,

 

It’s Who You Are, LadyAnn, Stop Missing Him!

 

LadyAnn Graham-Gilreath

Sept. 27^th, 2012

 

Dedicated to: Terry Allen Seale: “Over 30 years of Lost Love!”

  © for LadyAnn Graham-Gilreath

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem for the emotion of love. I like the flow of thoughts and the understanding you are alone without your beloved. A lot of hidden story in the poem. I like the use of repetition. This would be good verbal poetry. It is filled with real life and emotion. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[LadyAnn68]

This one was to get me through the night we said goodbye! I almost died an I know my heart did! But I am clean and very alive now...want to live everyday to the fullest to make up for lost time...it is my writing that makes my life worthwhile. I thank you for reading htis one it was personal and you felt that.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Wow, okay, now THIS is meant to be a song! It fits song lyrics perfectly.

(Fast tempo, jaunty beat -kind of like a Dido song, "Here With Me" speed)
The singing melody goes like this:
B-D-F#-F#
B-D-F#-F#
B-D-F#-G
A-D-F#-F#

Bm
You were lost
D
You think you're found
G
It was high cost
D
I was a romantic sound
Bm
A night bird ca-alled you
D
Like you were...his
G
But through and through,
D
You were missed

Bm D
It's not the way he left
G
It's just his game
D
How long your hair really is
E A
It's not how you spell your name!

D
It's who you ARE, LadyAnn!!!

(Follow the same structure for the other versus, but end like this...)
D Bm G A
It's who you ARE, LadyAnn, stop missing him!!!

I could work on it some more, but I really think those chords would work very well for a tense but poignant song. This is a PERFECT set up for a Verse, Pre-Chorus, Refrain Type Chorus kind of song structure. The two first parts would go by back to back and then there would be a musical interlude before the last verse...with the unexpected outro on the last line above.

This is such a heart rending piece about how love can leave you unsettled and broken apart. You are being very powerful here; by saying how you will reassert who you are, you are also simultaneously being vulnerable in front of us readers, which makes this very accessible, which is GOOD WRITING, and it also makes this very much like a song, which is why i was instantly inspired to write chords and make it one. The chords can be changed of course. They are just placeholders. However,I think they work pretty well with the right beat. It is a kind of a chah-cha-cha--cha-cha-chah-chah-chah. I think the cleverest part of this is that you open yourself up and are in transition at the time you are freezeframed in. By holding on that moment we are able to more effectively be let into this moment in time, which allows us to feel the same way you are. The last lines are very powerful as well, because they add the most detail.

I don't know how else to best describe this...It is a SONG. For sure, these are lyrics. Read Sheila Davis' "The Songwriting Idea Book" and you will see this follows the classic pattern of all good lyrics. The first verse draws you in. The pre-chorus and refrain are repeated, with a variation at the end. The second verse expands on the idea but in a new light -now incorporating those around you in society. It is through their eyes. The third verse should actually use the chord structure from the pre-chorus instead of the verse. It is the most detailed and most concluding. It feels like a great song. You have a hit!

By the way, after I posted this it took away my spacing of the chords. Suffice to say that the chords belong on the end word of each line for most of the lines.

[LadyAnn68]

Hi Robbie, long time no hear...are you well and happy?

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I'm well, and very introspective lately. I want people here to know I am still around, I am in it for the long haul! I really take time to write, so I am not going anywhere...

[LadyAnn68]

Lovely...did you read my latest...wow I got a zillion reviews (Not on WC) but still wow! Don;t you love it when everyone likes your work? Have a great weekend~ LadyAnn

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I'm still around, ups and downs. I am generally a happy camper of a person, but just busy with work lately.