Yes, I do hate you because you�re beautiful!

Yes, it is true that you are beautiful,

The spiting image of Kylie Minogue,

With all the grace of a dream, God knows,

And yet you discuss me!

 

I hate you!

 

Your tone has an air; some might believe to be charming,

But your manners are dreary and also quite alarming,

You dress to impress, on every occasion,

And yet you repulse me!

 

Queen Bee! Indeed!

 

Follow your roots, Sunshine,

It’s time to dye, upon seeing the beast inside,

Would you go out on a limb and try to change?

You should be ashamed!

 

Humiliations galore!

 

Unworthy men grovel at your pink painted toes,

Flash car, need not be a Smartie, where money lies anything goes,

Yet do you even stop to wonder why these men indulge your foul-mouthed lies?

Darling, they’re too busy trying to pop the hood on Miss Double D! Surprised?

 

Think about it!

 

And while you sit there looking lost, dissertated of all common sense,

Contemplate something else, if you are capable,

If your bounty was ever lost, Lady Vain,

Do you truly believe you could act the same?

 

Status terminated…

Reviews

[C. Harter Amos]

Boy, what a rant! I think this has to rate as the strongest "hate" poem on the site! If getting your feelings out and telling this person off was what you were after, you did a grand job of it. I have to add that you've proven just how creative you are. You've been disgusted, repulsed, and the best line of them all the men are.."...too busy trying to pop the hood on Miss Double D." Got to love a good old-fashioned in your face rant. The set up is good. The eyes are drawn to your statements on the right, which is what you meant to happen, I'm sure. We go from "I hate you" to "Queen Bee, Indeed" to "Humiliations Galore" and "Think about it" to end with a grand slam..."Status Terminated". I don't know about righteous, but it's a hell of a rant. Kudos for best anger on site!

[sk8tagirl95]

brilliant

[Wandering Bard]

Wonderful poem Lauren. :) And thanks for entering it into my contest.

[Màiri Andrus]

lol Gee that made me think of someone that I'm dealing with in my life right now. Some women really just do not know how to be sisters do they.

Kudos I liked it a lot.

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

I love this one. Wonderful depth, style, everything. Thank you for entering this into my Any and All Poetry Contest. You have again made it into the first cut of finalists.

[Jaffa Forbes]

haha! Very enjoyable read, 'Lady Vain'... nice...! I love the structure too.
cool stuff.
jaff

[DiamondNRough AKA Patty..]

WOW...great piece...would love to share this with a few that I know it fits. Enjoyed it!

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

"And yet you discuss me!"



I think you might want to change that to "disgust".
So what if she discusses you!!
If she cusses you, we might have a cat fight on our hands!
Love All, mejasha

[Raef C. Boylan]

"Follow your roots, Sunshine,
It's time to dye, upon seeing the beast inside" - funny word play here.

"If your bounty was ever lost, Lady Vain,
Do you truly believe you could act the same?" - great ending, powerful impact and an important question; there's no point in falling back on looks because they don't last.

This is a great piece. I don't approve of hatred, but I don't approve of shallowness either, and I think we can all relate to this piece as there are a lot of these kind of people out there. It's hard to have any kind of relationship with them because they're absorbed in themselves and their image.
The bitter, mocking tone works really well.

An entertaining, clever and heartfelt write.
Thanks for posting this.

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LoL! Very amazing rant here!! Very well said. The celebrity status is something these days, i swear lol. And you're right, too. Men these days just only want to 'get inside'. It's so weird lol. Women in hollywood just keep gettin into trouble-trouble. Beauty, and in trouble. And dont get me started on Paris Hilton lol...what a wrap sheet she has lol. As well as for the men there, they need a good kick in the a*s too lol. Very good points u make in here hehe.

Mikey