Unspoken Words

Every time you speak to me, your words bring me pain,

Like an unattended flame, your words burn deeper everyday,

Cats claw, and scream at one another, yet you just speak so softly.

 

Just put me in my coffin and hold your tongue!

 

Whisper no more in my range, words that cut my every vein,

Vile and sullen I can take but not one more syllable of your hate,

Putrid dislike for my look, rancid contempt for thoughts. 

 

Every time you speak to me, your words bring me pain.

 

Reviews

[Bubo]

Very sad when we are on the receiving end of someone who belittles and is nasty.........words can be so cruel and painful...........your descriptions of rather being in a coffin instead of hearing one more word are so
sad............i hope this is not an account of how you feel..........
alot of emotion and pain in vivid words.

[DirectTangent]

Evocative. Words like putrid, rancid, vile - not only pain but decomposition and decay.

You revoke that which we recited in our youth - "sticks and stones may break our bones, but names (words) will never hurt me". It's not so, is it? Words can wound deeply. And your piece describes this in dark but potent tones.

Nice.

[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

very good poem. i especially liked the use of contrasting ideas in this line: "Cats claw, and scream at one another, yet you just speak so softly."

i just felt it ended too soon. Readinf it out aloud when I start to really get into it and feel the words it's nearly over.

Great write none the less

[hyancynthstofeedthysoul]

Well stated. Only only problem. Vial should be vile.

[youngwriter222]

"Every time you speak to me, your words bring me pain."

Awe, words are the worst kind of hurt. You made this poem with alot of heart, but very powerful.
Words hurt and yet they come out of peoples muth like it's no big deal

Great poem

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

A very unconventional piece. Nice, short, and very upfront, but not what I'm looking for in the contest. Thank you for your entry into the Any and All Poetry Contest.

[Karen Raquepo]

The poem's well declared by a patient heart.I like it.

[strange_gurl]

very beautiful peice and very sad

[theklauz]

Incredible job.
I just recently finished reading the book "Interview With The Vampire" and this poems reminds me of a particular scene in the book (the reference to the coffin helped there), but the metaphoric use of the term was also done magnificently.
I think this poem really shows it's message well and is very well crafted.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Nice job here of demonstrating a thought coming full circle (book-ending using the first and last line).
You've done well with the subtle rhyming too "pain"..."every day", "vein"..."hate". Good use of emotive language and morbid imagery to convey the narrator's despair and hurt in this piece.
The lay-out works well too.

If if this is an account of personal experience, I hope it's got better.
Thanks for posting this.

[BuStY B***H]

I like it..I truely understand what u mean and I can compare this is somthing in my life...which is what poems are supposed to do! i like it alot....

-BB