Desert

A Poem by Lauren Xena Campbell

Golden dust dancing

Devil plain harsh like hell

An ox skull goal

© 2008 Lauren Xena Campbell

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Ken Simm.

Perfect. So much with so little. Ken

Posted 17 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

W.k.kortas

Two quick things: if it's a haiku, you're a syllable short in the second line, and I find "goal" a curious choice in the last line--maybe you were shooting for "gaol"? That being said, it's all you could want in a haiku--has the somewhat ethereal feeling that works well for the form, and it's extremely visual. Nicely done, just needs some minor tweaking.

Posted 17 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on February 6, 2008
Last Updated on February 6, 2008

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Lauren Xena Campbell

Somewhere on the edge of the imagination

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Dreams are not made to be broken, but are created in the heart to write destiny! I've always loved making up stories and putting words down onto paper, despite the fact that I only really learnt to.. more..