seeking

Stammering through an opening

dark

cold

> A place of reckoning mow is beckoning

 

moving aimlessly ahead

silent

lost

>one step at a time approaching

 

the seat of conciousness non-existant

empty

blank

>no thoughts reside in the cavity

 

>no destination

>no mark

Reviews

[Voice11]

This is really well done. I like the style, and the visual isn't bad either. Great job

[R J Askew]

This sort of captures the feeling of getting up to read a poem in public. Like, 'Why the hell am I doing this?' as you plod to the mic in a state of semi-consciousness and numbing terror. And in the UK a 'no mark' is sometimes used as slang for a person who's a failure. 'Him? He's a no mark...expletive, expletive.'

[Zane Mathias]

Good Write Love the imagery! B.P. :) short and sweet

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very well done... you captured those feeling of hopelessness sometimes when a soul loses their way through the maze of pain in the world. Dark but great work.

[Staci Brown]

the rites of passage we all must pass... don't fear of the unknown inhibit you from finding your way. :D if the path you find yourself traveling isn't satisfying, know that there's no steadfast rule stating you can't change paths. :D

you've presented a nice write here that many will relate too, especially those experiencing their youth and coming of age :D

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[The realest]

The feeling of being lost can be dreadful even when you know where your going. The constant search the piece of the puzzle thats always missing in your heartbeat keep seeking and you will find my friend