Love....

My feelings....

Are not hidden...

I'm proud to show how I feel...

I would die...

..For you..

LOVE...

Even though we're not together...

We can....

Still...
 
Pretend...

LOVE....

Author's Note

I wrote this in 2006... But somehow I relate to this now... I Guess it made sense back then too...

Reviews

[biggerthenu]

this is a little confusing but i love it because of the mistake makes this great i dont know if u meant for this to be read like that or not but if u would revise it to read like that it would be awesome!!!

[The Perfectionist]

I don't really have much to say about something this short and this simple, only that the ellipses at the end of nearly every line get very redundant. If nothing else, you definitely don't want them at the end of each LOVE. Something that big is a statement, and should end as such, not trail off. It feels like you're trying to force the reader to read through this slowly, but it just looks silly to see it every time. A good poem will set the pace on its own, if you let it.

[Tia Sanchez]

Love.
Such a complex word.
Sounds like you love someone you're not technically supposed love.

[Anonymous]

Oh, how simplicity in poetry can be the most powerful... Excellent write, hun...

~Black Rose

[Jack]

I liked this. I feel like with the style, words, and simplicity of this poem you were able to capture the concept of love that lasts forever even when it is 'over'. Even when we are no longer 'in love' or feel love for a person anymore, the experience in and of itself taught us how to love and that will last forever. Nice write!

[Dutch Jr.]

A lot of emotion coming through these simple words. Nice job.