The All-Knowing

To a star studded sky that wasn't there when I was born.
A dark gap. A place where light holds no face.
Answer me.
Answer the ones that are torn.
Find our thoughts with your instruments.
Help us save our own race.

 

Take our concerns lightly and pick up the crumbs from the fallout.
And if you decide to fix your own fault,
People will know,
That your eyes are knowing.
Answer us starry sky.
Answer us, the all-knowing.

Reviews

[Meredith Leigh]

Jon that was beautiful! I have a few idea's what it could be about, but who cares what it's about? We're all going to interperate it differently, and get different meanings out of it. The fact is, it was absolutley wonderful, and the imagery was great. The vocabulary and flow suited the mood really well, and I just loved it! & you! A whole frigging buch!!!!

- Kriss

[Wunderlich]

This is really, really good. Amazing imagery, great word choice, just an absolutely beautiful piece of writing. Excellent job.

[Song of Mercy]

The speaker has their own intimate relationship to share the bitterness the pain so comfortably with the all knowing, a sense of trust which relays as true humility comes through in the end. Really good Jon. Barb

[Clockwork]

I like the overall message of the piece. Your language was fairly good as well. What I would like to see you do is move some of the lines down. (Separate them.) Some are a little long and they break up the flow. Other than that good write.